last letter

for nearest one

feeling irritating,

because all faces are glomy

culprit is i

so i have to leave 

i can't express but 

jimmy was my nearest 

her leaving 

force me to leave

after four month

when i came back

i can't but went her room

to get back my memoirs 

i decide to meet her 

when i feeling her absence 

i found a open letter there

which was written a month ago for me

i tried to communicate with her to meet

but a shock hold me back of her death 

i was thundered 

just thundered 

i opened her letter 

and found to tear

" my heart want to see you with great eager" 

nothing else...........

Author's Note

it's my emotion

Reviews

[Calibaster]

I can feel it. It is very good! you are a talented poet! I look forward to reading more of your writing! Keep up the good work!

[kelvin]

Nice read here it has good sense of feel of emotion here could there be some regret here? nice piece as always keep writing fellow writer

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

I laud the seminal message and the grouping-with-order of the sentiment. However, the translation causes me to labor and ultimately to cringe. Is it possible to revisit this with a better consideration for the target language? If that is not a goal of this piece then please feel free to ignore. Speaking only of the message then I must say it is admirable to try and pen this as an emotive that can relieve the original anguish or reflections that inspired it. Good job.

[DrD]

A touch of drama and a lingering nostalgia. A good combination and a very enjoyable read.

[gombeggar]

yes, there is a lot of hasty emoting here full of need and desire...nice but does translate a little difficultly

[Deron Alexis]

this was really cool keep this up just put all the feelings in

[Felicity's Eve]

This is wonderful :)

[de_maruf]

thanks

[Felicity's Eve]

:)

[Phillitup]

good...great actually...:)

[de_maruf]

thanks a lot

[Sami Khalil]

i opened her letter

and found to tear
A nice write.

[de_maruf]

thanks

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. Peace

[quinfinn]

your thoughts and memories are beautiful and pendulous herein. i know the place you refer to in this sorrowful write.

[de_maruf]

hmm
may be
sorrowfulness is the place of feelings

[quinfinn]

it is my belief that joy and sorrow are connected...with a very fine line between

[de_maruf]

it is difficult to identify joy and happiness
it's varies from man to man