Daughter River

Daughter River

A Poem by la Abeja

Dear Daughter River

How different you seem

What happened on your journey down

To meet your Father Sea?

You were once so full

So lively, so free

Now you barely flow and

Resemble your Sister Stream

 

They said I was too wild

And therefore must be tamed

Judgement passed, the work began

To cage me up, to be forever dammed

 

With my flow reduced and banks exposed

I found I was filling again

Not with anything I knew before

With something new, called Man

 

This man dug deep to move my sides

To make me straight and plane

This is how I thought I'd stay

Until the monsoon came

 

From your sides, Mother Mountain

Came rain for three full days

The deluge jumped my bars

To cover land beyond my banks

 

My flooded sides finally drained

And Man came back to me

He found his land beaten and torn

Many precious things swept to sea

 

Building began again, "Stronger", "Higher"

Were the things cried for

So this is why, Mother Mountain

I am your River no more


© 2010 la Abeja



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What an emotional write. I love the things that you have touched upon in this piece, very deep and introspective. A few wording and grammar errors here and there, but you have the skeleton of something quite amazing. Beauty and tragedy often live symbiotically...nicely done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Love the personification. The wordings are very applicable for the message it conveys. Also, it's amazing how the river has a humane voice, and all the while, going against what humanity stands for in this poem. The flow is melodious and smooth.

Keep Writing. ^___^

Posted 6 Years Ago


Absolutely Fabulous!

Posted 6 Years Ago


The first stanza blew me off, great job.

I love the emotion; the entire write is eloquent and fluent. Wow.

In my library.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Emotional story of the damage done to a river, from the rivers perspective. We should protect our rivers, keep them flowing and healthy. Many people are not aware of all the reasons to keep a river natural, including the banks and surrounding floodplain. Not only for their beauty but for the water absorption and wildlife and so much more. Thank you for sharing this powerful story.

Posted 7 Years Ago


I like the impression of man on the river, and the family of nature. The honest reply of Daughter River is great too.

Posted 7 Years Ago


This is such an emotional write here. So sad
I like the way you have written and expressed yourself

Posted 7 Years Ago


wow! pretty but sad, very nice :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


What an emotional write. I love the things that you have touched upon in this piece, very deep and introspective. A few wording and grammar errors here and there, but you have the skeleton of something quite amazing. Beauty and tragedy often live symbiotically...nicely done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A tragic poem seen from the River's point of view. Very nicely done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


A sad poem of man hunger to destroy all that is beautiful. Your story and detail made this a powerful poem. We need to protect the water ways and oceans. The poem is outstanding. Told a real story.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on March 14, 2010
Last Updated on July 13, 2010
Tags: Environment, Nature, Poetry, Water, River

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la Abeja
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