Grace Moves Me, I Step Aside (Villanelle)

Grace Moves Me, I Step Aside (Villanelle)

A Poem by Marianne Rose
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Meeting the attack with spiritual aikido.

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Grace moves me, I step aside
when force fills your blazing fist -
met with love, I can abide.

In sanctuary, I hide
from swords meant to slash each wrist -
grace moves me, I step aside.

Your words burn with hate and pride.
I falter, cannot resist -
met with love, I can abide.

On waves of sadness, I ride;
now ashore in blinding mist,
grace moves me, I step aside.

You burn up the tears I've cried
in desert heat, heart dismissed.
Met with love, I can abide.

Shadows gather in my midst,
on this light try to subsist.
Grace moves me, I step aside;
met with love, I can abide.

© 2016 Marianne Rose



Author's Note

Marianne Rose
Another experiment with the Villanelle form, capturing what I am trying to practice in daily life- meeting each conflict with love, letting grace move me out of danger, even when the attack is fierce.

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Villanelle is one of my least favorite forms, becuz I'm not a fan of repeating lines. Many times a poet will repeat lines just becuz the form says so. But in your poem here, the repetition does sound much more natural & like it belongs in your message, furthering your message, rather than just being a parrot type thing. Now for your message . . . I love it. What this sounds like to me is "turn the other cheek" which is my only way to deal with people who come at me with anger or meanness. I'm not trying to employ grace, so much as I just can't find the words to match an assault, so I just go away. I love the way you describe this process in detail . . . everything comes across as being very originally-stated.

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Marianne Rose

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for your in depth review! I agree- the lines repeating can be like a meaningless e.. read more



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This is beautiful again great rhythm and cadence. You pick the right words. The message itself is beautiful and so intimate.

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Marianne Rose

1 Year Ago

Thank you- I don't often try forms with rhyme because they take thought and I prefer to write from v.. read more
Villanelle is one of my least favorite forms, becuz I'm not a fan of repeating lines. Many times a poet will repeat lines just becuz the form says so. But in your poem here, the repetition does sound much more natural & like it belongs in your message, furthering your message, rather than just being a parrot type thing. Now for your message . . . I love it. What this sounds like to me is "turn the other cheek" which is my only way to deal with people who come at me with anger or meanness. I'm not trying to employ grace, so much as I just can't find the words to match an assault, so I just go away. I love the way you describe this process in detail . . . everything comes across as being very originally-stated.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marianne Rose

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for your in depth review! I agree- the lines repeating can be like a meaningless e.. read more
meeting conflict with love...
when grace hits. abiding in that.
the wrist part makes me think of fighting
an addiction of self harm... and identifying with
the person as a person... grace wins here.

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Marianne Rose

1 Year Ago

Thank you for your positive review- these days it is harder to practice, but I still hold the intent.. read more
A noble pursuit, and a lovely representation of such.

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Marianne Rose

1 Year Ago

Thanks for your encouraging review!
Hi Marianne Rose I found your name on the top reviewers page and came to read some of your poetry and how pleased I am I did, this one is amazing to read in its style I never read before but it looks hard to accomplish even though you make it look easy with how it is so smooth with perfect rhymes and great imagery in emotion and passionate expressions, you must be a really confident believer in your faith and I adore how you use the met with love, I can abide line to repeat your feelings so beautifully, I think you are a very talented poet who really knows her art, one to follow in example and I enjoyed sharing it -- thank you! :)

HUGGS!
Sammi

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Marianne Rose

1 Year Ago

Well, thank you, Sammi, and hugs back to you! Until I joined this site in late June, my writings rem.. read more
Sammi

1 Year Ago

I love meeting you and fining your poetry Marianne Rose -- thank you! :)
~ the words that come to my mind upon reading this post are 'resilience' and 'fortitude'... ~ it takes a rare amount of both to not drop to the level of someone who is trying to provoke a conflict... ~ personally, i am still a work-in-progress... ~ i haven't mastered the art of stepping away but i'm workin' on it...

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Marianne Rose

1 Year Ago

Me too! Just when you master one conflict, a more challenging one arises to test the intention and s.. read more
Goodness, Marianne!
Wonderfully composed and presented in easy-flowing seven-counts for our reading pleasure and appeal, this is a most fetching Villanelle, spot-on in every way this form should be.
Image and emotion laden, you've made this form look (almost) too easy; though, we both know the effort it took to make it this way. I know that some forms fit my nature more harmonious than others, as it would seem the Villanelle does yours.
Your message chimes through straight and clear, warding-off and defending against all onslaughts against your glowing, determined spirit, and you do it all by the grace of your unconquerable faith, it would appear … and, by this splendid Villanelle, of course! : )
Simply beautifully done, Dear Lady-Poet.
As a martial artist, I love the thought of "spiritual Aikido".

Thank you sincerely for including my input with your efforts; I am, indeed, honored …
hugs to you! ⁓ Richard


100/100

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Richard

1 Year Ago

It's perfect … "don't fix what ain't broken" … LOL!
Marianne Rose

1 Year Ago

Okay . . . I'll trust you on that. Thanks again.
Richard

1 Year Ago

"Thumbs-up!
Powerful, worthwhile and good poetry Marianne.
"Standing in the midst of war,
Shadows gather 'round my light
Grace moves me, I step aside
Met with love, I can abide."
The above lines. Outstanding ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marianne Rose

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much, my friend, for your recognition and praise- I'm glad the ending worked- a difficu.. read more
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

It did and you are welcome Marianne.
Isn't it amazing that we have the most powerful weapon in our side that can conquer every obstacle? Love and grace are two of the most amazing character traits a man can have... So uplifting the way you wrote it... Whenever I feel like I'm in pressure of darkness and hardship, grace has been the weapon that helps me to come out of such situations... It's an amazing way to find peace with life... Love can heal every wound, it can run a dying person...

You are keeping on inspiring us with your powerful words... With the form you have perfectly presented the concept of your poem... Hats off to you frnd...

Sincerely
Dhiman

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Marianne Rose

1 Year Ago

Thank you dear friend, yes, grace and love are so powerful, literally life-saving gifts to us that w.. read more
Inject Positivity

1 Year Ago

That's why we met isn't it? It's a part of a greater plan... I really love what you said, human worl.. read more
I really liked reading your poem. The phrase,"Met with love, I can abide." Says it all. No matter what love covers all. Beautifully expressed and well written.Great Job!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marianne Rose

1 Year Ago

Thank you! Your reviews are filled with understanding and compassion. I appreciate finding others wh.. read more

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