Give in

About God

How can we stay gold

When so much black surrounds us?

Coal black edges overlap the surface

Black, gold's only enemy

A plague of pain conquers

Defeated I stand

Reach out to me with a loving hand

Push the ebony curtain off

Wash me with pure hope

Clean my of my wrong

Reviews

[Emma]

This is the poem I am using for my video poetry project! I love this poem! Great read Great job Maddy dear!

[child-of-promise]

I have to really identify with this...

how can we stay gold

how can we stay pure when so much sin surrounds us... my heart really cries out with this... God is the only one who can cleanse us...

oof, I have shivers...

[Ki]

What does it mean to you???

[Anonymous]

This poem is amazing. The metaphors and flow fit in so perfectly. The words stuck with me after I read it. My faith as a Christian sometimes feels weak, and I also feel as I need Him to reach out a loving hand. Very deep and emotional, excellent write.

[Vincent Esprit FMI]

The confidence is there Maddy. I love this line "Defeated I stand" This is the pillar of this piece to me....keep the faith I am a christian too....great right

[Undying Hate (Hanna)]

Wow I love the flow of the lines and the metaphors. These lines cut really deep and stick with the reader for awhile. Love it!

[Luna Northstar]

I love it, the message, the words, the flow. Your writing continues to memorize me.

[Will Hatch]

How can we stay gold when so much black surrounds us? what a powerful-wrenching line. Also for a beginning it sucked me in just like that. This poem is real, true, and has a great meaning as well. Awesome write!!

-Will