I'm Okay

The second poem in my compilation, A Tragic Story...

Abandoned

A hollow stand in

To the boy I used to be

I’m no longer me,

So who am I?

The boy with the pain,

-the boy who can’t cry?

Or the a*****e, you all know

Hiding when he walks by?

 

I’m a street urchin

Condemned- for your sin

I can’t win

 

S**t, I’m living off the street

With the same clothes,

From my head to my feet,

-they all know

 

Everyday running

With worn out sneakers

Every night sleeping

Beneath high school bleachers

Splitting my time between confused teachers

And useless preachers

Talking about monetary leaders

Lip-syncing the word of the Lord

Feeding off our hopes, our money theirs to hoard

 

How’d I end up here?

Its hard to say

I can boil it down to a single day

But there was really so much more

A compilation of indications

-of feelings I had stored

In for far too long

In a different State, I’d learned to hate

While mother was now gone

 

Charged and sentenced

Silently-I screamed good riddance

While inside I violently sought my penance

For all the pain, the loss, the game

Played with my emotions

Inside, explodin’

A torrent of commotions

And cynical notions

About the planet

I was tired d****t!

 

And when my drunken uncle,

-yelled at my brother

It made my sanity buckle

I had to say something, he was all I had

And if you f**k with him, that s**t’ll really make me mad

 

So yeah, I said some things

Can you blame me?

And yeah maybe,

I should have stayed quiet

But he shouldn’t have been so offended by it

If he didn’t like it

He shouldn’t buy it

-be sober, go ahead and try it

But he just denies it

And that’s alright, but why b***h?

Did you really need to kick me out over it?

 

But that’s alright, I’ll be fine out here

I can smoke all I want

And steal the occasional beer

 

Underage, caught up in adult ways

High school drop out,

Having to work every day

Running eight miles, just to make the pay

But it’s all alright,

-I’m okay…

Author's Note

The second poem in my story. I'll probably have one or two more, before I start posting ones I've already done before. Starting with The Devil Wears Blue. As always, let me know what you think, criticism is always welcome ^^

Reviews

[b.platte]

Wow. You're just delving deeper and deeper into your struggle. I'm always amazed by how you turn stories into poetry. You are skilled in your craft, my friend.

'Condemned- for your sin
I can’t win'

Loved that beat i dropped in my head when I read this.

I also loved how you rhymed bleachers, teachers, and preachers line after line and it all fit together so well.

[MachinaWriter]

I like to think that I'm not really writing poetry. Because it feels more like I'm discovering it. The lines are already there, I'm just blowing off the dirt and revealing the lyrics beneath, that have been hidden away inside all along. I never feel like I'm trying to find words that rhyme or think of ways to fit them together. They just do. I don't know lol It probably sounds ridiculous xD I'm glad you like it, though. I think my favorite line from this, though, was "lip-syncing the word of the Lord", something about that rang through to me when I typed it up. lol Once more, thank you for taking the time out of your day to read this. It means a lot when people take to my writing, simply because of how much these poems specifically mean to me. Thank you ^^

[b.platte]

Yes I completely understand where you are coming from, and you worded that beautifully by the way.

That line stood out for me as well.

:)

[Southern Cross]

There is no rapper around that can tell a story of hard times , a life gone wrong when it shoulda been right the way you penn this.. Bugger off Einemem..your life was privileged. As awful as this story is , I can't wait to read it through till the end..You are amazing

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you, so much. That really does mean so much to me. You're also pretty amazing yourself ^^

[Damien Davison]

Deep man, you really open up and bring the reader in to your state and experiences. Another good write

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you, man. I've put a lot of these together in a compilation of my life. Pretty much an autobiography of poetry titled A Tragic Story. It can be found as a book on this site.

[Damien Davison]

I will definitely be checking it out piece by piece. Good work.

[Belinda]

I've I only had your way of words when it comes to poems! The wording and writing and flow is just perfect. I love the story poems! I only hope to pick up some of the skill from you!

[Belinda]

If I only*

[Sirius King]

i can picture everything u write, this is really good

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you, as always. ^^

[JodieH]

I love it! The rhyming is perfect, it really flows :)

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you. ^^ Be sure to read more and let me know what you think. I'm glad you liked it :)

[eglantine]

I love how brutally honest your writing is, and always full of concrete images. You tell it as it is, no holding back. Thanks for sharing

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you, I'm really glad you enjoyed it. As always, I value your comments on all my poetry. Thank you for reading this.

[Danielle]

Well written and a good follow up from the previous poem.

[GMHeft]

powerful and angry, yet can feel the anger turn to strength and determination... I can hear it spoken, I can hear it rapped... love it

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you, because I was definitely very angry at this time. A lot of the things I've written I've rapped at competitions, so I tend to have that style in it without trying. I'm glad you liked it.

[GMHeft]

ahhh and yes, it defiantly shows in very much a good way because it makes a very good impact to the power of the words.

[Kelsey]

I really love the ending of this. I love how the story is coming together. (:

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you. The last stanza of this was my favorite to write.