"The Them & They"

"The Them & They"

A Poem by MadeMan99
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A filipino life...

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They have their hands and plates full

But them had no clean water to pour

They had their bread from power

But them had their stomachs from left overs

They have their pockets filled with gems got from down under

But them sons played their toys from crumpled papers

They had their daughters books from unknown treasure chest

But them received  nothing for what should be paid for

They give their people waste of digest

But them had their justice born unblessed

They closed their magnificent doors when it rains

But them fold from their masters’ covered with pain

Stop of what do they Explain

Them better have much to gain…


© 2010 MadeMan99



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MadeMan99
Hello I just joined this awesome site, I made this poem a year ago.. please tell me what you think about it thanks! and hello to everyone :)

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Ayun! Pilipino.... or at least I assume you are one..

Anyway. It's a good poem. It shows the problems concerning the Philippines. (and i hope people would realize that).

But I saw an error that lost my feel, and that is the grammar.
I know you're trying to portray "they" as the higher class men and "them" otherwise, but the usage is a bit too forced. Being a bit too forced made it a bit less interesting.

Don't take it too seriously. Ok? :D

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Thanks! appreciate it :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Ayun! Pilipino.... or at least I assume you are one..

Anyway. It's a good poem. It shows the problems concerning the Philippines. (and i hope people would realize that).

But I saw an error that lost my feel, and that is the grammar.
I know you're trying to portray "they" as the higher class men and "them" otherwise, but the usage is a bit too forced. Being a bit too forced made it a bit less interesting.

Don't take it too seriously. Ok? :D

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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MadeMan99

Cainta, Rizal, Philippines



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