Nightmares

A double senryu about what plagues me at night.

Worlds of chaos;

Masochistic subconscious...

How did I get here?

Abstract my spirit

The Dark in me awakens

As I lay asleep

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Molko 🌸
I'd like to take this opportunity to welcome you to Writer's Café, and to say I hope you will enjoy it here enough to make this site your new home with us. : )
There are many good writers here to share with and learn from, even to become friends with.
I very much enjoy your poems, their imagery and passion, and the metaphor of your dark spirit awakening in your sleep, the chaos and self-punishment … great descriptions of Nightmares.
A couple of things caught my eye, Molko: (1) These are about human experiences, therefore, they are Senryu, as Haiku are about Nature and seasons. (2) V2L2 is short two syllables … consider "The darkness in me awakes" or "The dark in me awakens", to make it 7-syllables.
There are a number of Senryu.Haiku rules broken, as well, but I'll not burden you further, as I don't want you to miss my praise and enjoyment of your excellent efforts in composing these two complimenting Senryu (message me if you'd like further info).

Thank you, Molko, ever-so warmly and gratefully, for sharing You and for joining us … again, "Welcome!" ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Molko'sWhispers]

Thank you for your feedback! Honestly, I didn't even know that a senryu existed, but you learn something new every day, right? I also did change wakes to awakens, because I did originally have that before I published it. Once again, thank you for the welcome and the review!

[KCthelastboyscout]

Funny.sometimes I have nightmares when im awake.To be so young you are far more worldly than I ever I was.ptobably are now.frightening how good a writer you are