Mediocrity

Mediocrity

A Poem by JelliFyshKissUs
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I don’t gag much 
On the silence anymore

Or the bore 
That froths forth 

From the bind of my mind

To the stumbling blocks that curve up my spine

And settle at the tip of my neck


Coddle-stone heaps of debris as my sleep

Dangles and tangles 
In a dream that swings most slothfully

Lazily
Hazily-I steep

Defying the bleak

Breaking the border bland in my hand

To stand on the wind and eat solstice again

With my heart tied around my eyes


No surprise that the piles
Of dandelion clouds

Disperse into a sea of butterfly wings

Whose flutter-by stings me with letters in my throat

And I choke on words that chirp like birds
And sing like sentences

Pretenses of blue
In a sky of sad

But at least I don’t gag
On the silence anymore

Or the bore 
That froths forth

From the bind of my mind

To the stumbling blocks that curve up my spine

And settle at the tip of my neck

© 2011 JelliFyshKissUs


Author's Note

JelliFyshKissUs
Writer's block attempts to hinder your creativity in spiteful ways and makes the things that do surface quite mediocre. But it's better than nothing.

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I think this is an amazing piece of writing, Shawn. Filled with innovative imagery and a delicate touch on the pen/keyboard to bring the ideas to imaginative life.
And I choke on words that chirp like birds
And sing like sentences

Pretenses of blue
In a sky of sad

But at least I don’t gag
On the silence anymore.... Exceptional and inspirational.


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Ok, well I;ll be honest, I'm not the best poet, or reviewer, but this poem spoke volumes to me. I got it...I get the words, and the imagery, and I love the repetition you used here....so for me that makes a great poem.....:)
Thanks for sharing, and I hope you get more writers block if this is what you end up producing....:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


and the god looked at what 'he' had done and said, 'it's better than nothing', but i say call ed's tip of the neck service for quick and efficient repair...

Posted 12 Years Ago


This had an airy feel that hovered in surrealism for me, a pleasant read.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Enjoying your reads, Im gonna have to read more, great use of wordplay to describe as you say Writers Block....

Posted 12 Years Ago


Liked this a lot. Overcoming writer's block can sometimes seem like giving birth to a ten pound baby, congratulations on getting over yours.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Thought-provoking, yet spellbinding. This is so much better than nothing. Excellent piece.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Amazing writing--You have taken a bad situation and absolutely made the best out of it--your words sing themselves

And I choke on words that chirp like birds
And sing like sentences



Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is superb writing. highly creative...and I agree what an open!!!! the imagery is off the charts fresh and vivid...this is fine tuned poetry!!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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oh god what an open!!!! "I don’t gag much
On the silence anymore" - love that - straight from the Book of Shawn lol! silky word plays - bind of my mind - so much going on here - brilliant descriptives throughout - I'll just end up reciting the whole poem if I were to quote favourite lines - and this is FAR, FAR from mediocre so stop that nonsense - I don't think you could do mediocre if you tried - "And I choke on words that chirp like birds
And sing like sentences" - so poetic - and "To stand on the wind and eat solstice again
With my heart tied around my eyes" - going into my favourites now - love the repetition at the end too to resolve it somewhat - but it doesn't have a clean circular end it's more ouroboric and self-consuming which I like! nice!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on October 5, 2011
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Tags: Writer's block, Silence in my head, A tingle of a thought, Mediocre, Stumbling as I find my voice aga

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JelliFyshKissUs
JelliFyshKissUs

Nashville, TN



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I don't know why my brain cramps up whenever I'm asked to tell others about me. Maybe I'm not that interesting. Maybe I'm being modest. Who knows? I'm a married mother of none who is devoted to .. more..

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