Laid Bare

Sometimes I can't help but feel so exposed.

Everythings laid bare tonight,
a cavalcade of cruelty,
a revelation under glass.
I'm your in-vitro boy,
all microscopes and,
suppositions, defiance,
in a bottle, trapped.

And all will be revealed tonight,
we'll see the faceless players,
dance and revel in their lusts,
and know the flesh of ancients,
tell me lover, do you want to fly?
To die? To wilt or be forever?
Tell me, little one, would you,
could you, meet me in the gardens,
screaming murder from your lips,
so rouged and marked with death?

I think you could.
Could I, defy, deify, you?
Be your concubine,
and courtesan? A role,
ill-suited for this flesh,
enshrined in maleness,
torn asunder, rent and  broken,
by your scathing, scything words.

You scared me with your innocence,
so vulnerable and weeping to me,
whispers through the phoneline,
preaching hatred laced with love,
so tender in denial of virtues.
Tell me, little girl, you on your,
skinned and broken knees,
hair all in ringlets, eyes in tears,
and tears amongst your alabaster,
flesh so ripe with longing.

Tell me, please, undo me,
free me from this torture,
damned and shaking,
broke and breaking,
all for want of knowing.
Lover, tell me how it is,
to be laid bare,
in all these falsehoods,
revelations, lover,
show me how to care.

Author's Note

Feedback appreciated :)

Reviews

[William]

I really like this. :D it has a good flow to it, and you make better word choices than half the people I've seen on here. Good job! And you started very strong, and wrapped it up so wonderfully. I LOVE the ending. :D
Just a one thing: "Everythings laid bare tonight," "Everything's"? Or am I wrong? D:

and I FRIGGIN'FRACKIN' LOVE this stanza:
"And all will be revealed tonight,
we'll see the faceless players,
dance and revel in their lusts,
and know the flesh of ancients,
tell me lover, do you want to fly?
To die? To wilt or be forever?
Tell me, little one, would you,
could you, meet me in the gardens,
screaming murder from your lips,
so rouged and marked with death?"

it is pure, stellar brilliance. [shine on! xD]

[LJW]

Pretty dark, pretty deep, pretty intense.