The Caliginous Sea

Alone in the dark

Dark blue sea surrounds me
Drowning I reach my hand
But there's no one to embrace me
Frightened by the abyssal silence,
I closed my eyes.

Author's Note

Do share your thoughts and advise me for improvement 😊

Reviews

[Pragati Chaudhary]

I loved the last two lines -

Wonderful!
Sorry for the delay in reviewing it.
I skipped reading & writing for a bit so!

[Govind singh]

I felt the last line "I closed my eyes"... wonderful.:)

[Malvika]

Thanks dear!

[Cole Thomas]

this piece is very intricately dark; it's so beautiful.

[Malvika]

thank you! :)

[Zoya]

The words, the sea, the silence...all too chilling. Wonderfully crafted.

[Malvika]

Thank you!!

[Zoya]

You're welcome!

[Ashwin Shanker]

Looks like u really need a hug :) ...
But writing helps one and all overcome the devil inside our head.

[Malvika]

Thank you so much:)

[Hannah]

Very powerful. It truly is terrifying to be alone. It can be overwhelming.

[Malvika]

Thank you for stopping by

[Haneefah]

SHORT, DEEP AND EXPLAINS SO MUCH. NICE PIECE DEAR.

[Malvika]

Thank you!!

[Mikku]

These five lines explained a lot.nice piece of work. Loved it

[Malvika]

Thank you!!

[sparkly.ghost]

This is so powerful... it flows so well, and, I don't know, there's just something about your writing style that is so uniquely beautiful and raw? Thank you for sharing this, it really is quite amazing!

[Malvika]

Thank you so much! ,means a lot

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Very nice, Mallishka...

Love the word 'Caliginous'!

In just five short lines you have created the image of being enclosed in darkness and giving yourself over to it very concisely. A very relatable theme for all, and particularly for us brooding writers and poets.

No improvement needed. Well written. Nice work.

[Malvika]

Thank you so much , means a lot.