When You're Gone

When You're Gone

A Poem by Manda
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This is about a girl who was once happy and fearless but when everything she loved was gone she felt alone and scared. She had no where to run or hide...for the first time she felt fear

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All I wanted was to be happy
When I'm with you there’s no fear
I don’t have to be alone
But when you're gone
I'm alone and scared
I have nothing to hold
Nothing to love
I stand in my own shadows
For comfort and company
But nothing seems to end my fear
I don’t know where to run or hide
My heart broken and unhealed
Why’d we have to leave
Why did goodbye happen
Is it because we had nothing left….
Or just nothing let to say

© 2009 Manda


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Very sad, makes me think of one of friends that moved away.

Posted 14 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Such an emotional write here,
Very well written and expressed as well!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Full of what happens when a relationship ends.

In your tiltle you used "your, a possessive pronoun, when you meant to use you're, mean you are as in "when you're gone"

In the last line you have let, when you meant left.

Overall this is a very nice piece, minus the small errors.

Posted 14 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

i really liked this. i have seen my friends in a smiler scenario after a brake up and it was verry smiler, well done. makes me feel verry alone. glad i found this. thank you


Posted 14 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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