Lays There In The Rain

Dancing in the rain... hiding the tears she cries. She cant take this pain and she is giving up

I dance in the rain

Hiding any sign of tears

I was so sad...

I couldnt take this pain

The rain fell hard on the ground

I could feel the tears wash away from my face

As the rain splashes against my face

I fall to the ground

Crying so hard

I dont have the energy to stand

I just cant fight these tears anymore

I am so cold...

I am shaking

I am so frightened

I am all alone

It is so dark...

The rain contiues to fall

I dont move...

I am still

I cant breathe

I just keep on crying

Nobody is there to save me

I lay there in the rain

With nobody there to help me up

To save me or this broken heart

I never knew how much it hurt

But after you left me everything was gone

My world dark and silent

There just wasnt any point

I used to smile so joyfully

But now I wipe the tears that fall

I am trying to wipe away the memories

It hurts to much to remember what we once had

To go on each and everyday without you there

Nobody stands by me anymore

Just like now...

Laying in the rain all alone

With just my broken heart

I miss you so...

But it hurts when I think of goodbye

Thats why I am laying here in the rain

Because you left me...

In terrible pain

Author's Note

Needs work... Work in progress. Give me your opinions

Reviews

[Satellite Heart]

I think this piece is very good. It flows nicely!

[Alelei]

Wow that's real good.
Great read (:

[Wolfe Greytome]

This reads very smoothly. You say it needs work, put I'd say it really only needs polished. Very well done.

[Elizabeth Marie O'neil-..]

i love it.
Im not sure if you were trying to rhyme or not but it was great
it was amazing to read and i felt like crying
you have writing that reaches out to grab you =D

[deeps]

Such a mournful and sorrowful write here!
Feelings all flow so wonderful.
It read very well I thought!