Remembering Hurts Me

A girl with a broken heart. She is all alone. She is always crying and thinking about the days they had once shared together. It is so hard for her trying to let go... to say goodbye

I dont want to be alone anymore

I dont want to fight this battle

The tears I still continue to wipe away

The memories still locked inside my head

I still remember the day you said goodbye

The day I learned what it felt like to fall

Every night I lay in my bed restless

Thinking about all the nights we shared together

I thought about how it felt to be in your warm arms

Or the feeling I got when we kissed

Those were the days

Before everything fell apart

Before you went and broke my heart

I miss you dearly

Why do memories have to hurt so bad

Why did you have to leave me

And say goodbye

Now I am all alone

All my tears fall from my face

I lay there...

Hopelessly

Reviews

[Wolfe Greytome]

You have a wonderfully lyrical quality to your writing when your words are emphasized by your emotions. This piece is no different. I do think you need to take to watch your language usage, as your works often contain small mistakes that detract from the power of the piece by distracting the reader. I noticed it in this work while reading the second line "I don't want to keep fight this battle" and the awkward feel of the line carried through to the rest of the piece. Other than that though, I feel that this is just the latest terrific write from a very talented young writer.

[Syldor]

The flow is smooth and fits the piece very well. The short, simplistic words have plenty emotion in them, and help make the poem understandable and give strength to the lines.

[Elizabeth Marie O'neil-..]

nice job with this one, i relate so easily. your work is just something everyone can relate too (:

[Jess.]

Aww man, this one I can totally relate to :(
I like it though, it's another awesome write from you!
Most poetry (most stuff that I read) have big words that I'd have to look up in Webster's to understand (lol), and overly descriptive lines in them, and I find it to be over the top at times. Don't get me wrong though, not saying that kind of poetry is bad, but you have a really nice way of taking simple words and making them sound so beautiful....making the piece seem real, instead of off in some fairyland.
Again, good write! =)

[deeps]

Such an emotional write here,
Full of pain and hurt! Expressed very well!