No ,you

No ,you

A Poem by Manel

You think I can't live without your
Dont be so sure Iam telling you
Loving you is whatI shoudn't do 
starting new is my preview
Living with you is just my pain
When I met you I had no brain
I let you skip in my veins
My mistake I wont explain 
It's time to take a new train 

© 2016 Manel



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Lovely poem! The rhyme scheme was catchy and I love the phrase "I let you skip in my veins", which can be interpreted as either a lighthearted, passing interest or a darker, more obsessive passion. For some reason, I also find a connection between the "veins" and the "new train" where iron veins are a term used to describe train tracks sometimes.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Manel

1 Year Ago

thank you Monica for this review



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Lovely poem! The rhyme scheme was catchy and I love the phrase "I let you skip in my veins", which can be interpreted as either a lighthearted, passing interest or a darker, more obsessive passion. For some reason, I also find a connection between the "veins" and the "new train" where iron veins are a term used to describe train tracks sometimes.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Manel

1 Year Ago

thank you Monica for this review
It's true that we often make mistakes... after all we are humans...
even God make mistakes...
but the feelings that came up from within you perfectly reaches to the reader...
nice one...
: )/Anindita

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Manel

1 Year Ago

thank you for your time reaing my writing
we make mistakes and we learn a lot from them it i.. read more
Anindita Janhabee

1 Year Ago

yes.. right... : )

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