Bonfire

Bonfire

A Poem by Matilda
"

Memory lane.

"

Bonfire.

 

Up in that hill, I recall.


Dark skies and bright stars.


Bottles everywhere I looked.


Watching you change the song from your car.


The bottles kept walking and greeting me.


So desperate, so drunk.


Why was she there? She wasn’t our friend.


She kept her composure while I kept my mouth filled with hard liquid.


The bonfire became silly really quickly.


Everything became silly.


All of our heads just touched the ground looking up.


We could feel all of our thoughts and ideas being stolen by the grass.


I guess that the dirt figured out that I loved you.


Hope it never told you.


Marshmallows kept melting while our brains did the same.


The night ended when the fire swallowed our souls.


I can recall.


© 2014 Matilda



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We could feel all of our thoughts and ideas being stolen by the grass.
I guess that the dirt figured out that I loved you.
Hope it never told you.

This is truly a beautiful write! The imagery and visual description makes it fresh and raw. Wonderfully done!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Matilda

3 Years Ago

You made my day! Thank you for your kind words.
Savannah Bly

3 Years Ago

Absolutely! Wonderful job!



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A true love fired up the souls making them one letting the warmth of the body go blend stirring the hearts and the souls with the proper compositions of crimson red colors of love. The warmth which freaks the mind and the faith which holds the reins keeping eyes on eyes ..everything's get poured into the veins and starts flowing through the body mingling with blood keeping the bodies alive with love. So, love's a way of being happy! I must say, "You've got a heart of love"..in other words, your a damn freaking romance writer and this's what you talents speaks and even which's best for world to put the world on fire ..lol I'd look forward reading your some more stuffs in a mean while. Keep writing!

Posted 3 Years Ago


Matilda

3 Years Ago

You made my day, thank you very much :)
I admire the visual and feel of your write. Well Done!

Posted 3 Years Ago


I was never a social person and the idea of a party was not my thing, However an old friend did talk me into going to one, It was at a pastors daughters house lol, Ill leave it at that, The party didn't last long, 15 minutes at the max, some ones car window got broken out, so every one had to leave. I never even got the beer in my hand yet, A guy asked me if I needed a beer and I said sure , he comes back with 5 12 packs !!! I said ok parties over but I will take some home with me . I got 2 12 packs and off I went. I don't miss those days by no means. I became a 7 year alcoholic among other things. Btw great metaphors you used:)

Posted 3 Years Ago


Matilda

3 Years Ago

Wow. Thank you for sharing that. I'm glad that my personal story made you remember some stuff of the.. read more
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3 Years Ago

Your very welcome:))))))))))))))))
Beautiful imagery of what unrequited love is like. I feel a lot of people will be able to relate to this one. Great work! (:

Posted 3 Years Ago


Matilda

3 Years Ago

Yes , we've all been through something similar to this but I think things like that just makes us st.. read more
Beautiful imagery...very relatable write...
I guess we all have our bonfire moments in one way or another.
Nice art.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Matilda

3 Years Ago

"Bonfire moments". Loved that. That should be a thing haha :) thanks for the review you are awesome
RichGee

3 Years Ago

Thank you and my pleasure!
Unrequited love and bonfire memories. A lot of people can relate to this one, I think.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Matilda

3 Years Ago

Absolutely, we have all been through something like this.
wonderfully phrased. to me, this is refreshingly new. the whole poem is good but some lines are stunning. delightful read. thanks for sharing.


Posted 3 Years Ago


Matilda

3 Years Ago

You make me happy, thanks !!
wow this is good..."marshmallows kept melting while our brains did the same/ the night ended when the fire swallowed our souls/ i can recall..."
amazing lines...i like the idea of hoping the dirt wouldn't tell..and how we can feel down and dirty when in a drunken stupor...but then the honesty comes out....and here a bit of jealousy...

very clever use of phrasing in this.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Matilda

3 Years Ago

That is so kind of you, thank you so much!
We could feel all of our thoughts and ideas being stolen by the grass.
I guess that the dirt figured out that I loved you.
Hope it never told you.

This is truly a beautiful write! The imagery and visual description makes it fresh and raw. Wonderfully done!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Matilda

3 Years Ago

You made my day! Thank you for your kind words.
Savannah Bly

3 Years Ago

Absolutely! Wonderful job!

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