Phone Call

Phone Call

A Poem by Mari Baptiste
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Gone are the days when love was an acceptable reason to be with someone... It's all about status now...

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Breathe in
Now, breathe out

"You'll be okay," 


My tears roll, and I continue to weep


I can hardly breathe


Breathe in
Breathe out
"Everything will be okay."


I hear his crying
On the other end of the line

I feel his tears
As if they are mine

We've fought hard for our love
But we've run out of time
He doesn't deserve this
Neither do I

I just can't understand
Why they couldn't see
That I loved him dearly
And that he loved me


How could they do this?
Do they even have hearts?
How heartless one must be
To pull two people apart!


Two people who loved each other
More than life itself
All because of an obsession
With looks!
Status!
Wealth!


Was our love not enough
For them to see?
To look past their fixation
On affluence and prestige?

We reminisce times we shared
For a few hours more
Times we laughed and smiled 
Before we knew the score


I promise to wait
And so does he
That this wasn't good bye,
We both agree


The time has come
To put down the call
As much as we'd want to
We couldn't further stall

I can't believe 
This is our last phone call


Breathe in
Breathe out 
Come on, deep breaths now

You'll be alright

"We'll meet again soon"



© 2017 Mari Baptiste



Author's Note

Mari Baptiste
The dialogues in bold print are basically self pep talks.

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Hi, Mari,
It's just Richard dropping-in to check you out.
Nice piece, with a believable storyline, good flow, a rather smooth rhythm, nice rhymes, slant rhymes, and an easy presentation to follow.
Your emotional element hits deep, as does the relatability in unfortunate circumstance that would deprive two passionate lovers of their chance at true happiness.
Rivals Tristan & Isolde and Romeo & Juliet.

Beautifully done, M'Dear … never give-up hope where love is true.
My warmest hugs to You! ⁓ Richard 🌺

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Mari Baptiste

1 Year Ago

Thanks, Richard 🙂

I'll be sure to send you a message or a read request whenever. .. read more
Richard

1 Year Ago

Please do, Mari ; )



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You have such a picturesque writing style.

Saying only what is necessary, you capture the precise emotions, and you are economical with words, with masterfulness of your craft, and an inherent intensity and passion.

I'm glad to have come across your words.
You are inspiring.

WELL DONE

Posted 6 Months Ago


Good job of mixing up the way your message is delivered. I like the self-talk intermissions & for the rest, your rhyme & rhythm flow well. I'm a little puzzled at how someone, anyone, could cause one of these lovers to break away from the other (it sounds like they have a good thing going, so why would the other one leave, even if someone pried him away?) I think there might be some cultural difference that I'm not understanding, becuz I would not be so sweet to this guy if he left me for status!?!? Anyhow, I'm impressed with your artful delivery even if I'm not fully understanding the way things went down with this couple (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 7 Months Ago


Mari Baptiste

7 Months Ago

I was actually forced by my grandmother to end things with him (personal touch there haha).
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barleygirl

7 Months Ago

Aha! Good to know! I like to understand the way other cultures & families interact. I'm glad to hear.. read more
Nice flow of thoughts. Hard to be waiting for someone. Time go slowly and we think too much. I liked the realistic feel of the words. Thank you Mari for sharing the amazing words and thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 7 Months Ago


Mari Baptiste

7 Months Ago

It really is hard, buuuut love really can conquer all sorts of difficult circumstances. ❤️
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Coyote Poetry

7 Months Ago

I agree my friend. Love is life and life is love.
Hi, Mari,
It's just Richard dropping-in to check you out.
Nice piece, with a believable storyline, good flow, a rather smooth rhythm, nice rhymes, slant rhymes, and an easy presentation to follow.
Your emotional element hits deep, as does the relatability in unfortunate circumstance that would deprive two passionate lovers of their chance at true happiness.
Rivals Tristan & Isolde and Romeo & Juliet.

Beautifully done, M'Dear … never give-up hope where love is true.
My warmest hugs to You! ⁓ Richard 🌺

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This comment has been deleted by the poster.
Mari Baptiste

1 Year Ago

Thanks, Richard 🙂

I'll be sure to send you a message or a read request whenever. .. read more
Richard

1 Year Ago

Please do, Mari ; )
Sad Romeo and Juliette as they are forced to part by families that do not understand their love or accept it. Beautifully described with very effective thought- speech style. Lovely form, flow, rhyme. Beautifully poignant. I hope they meet again

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mari Baptiste

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Annette. :)

I hope so too... :(
I can relate to your experience of love rejected. Your poem conveys the pain of breaking up, especially due to an outside factor. In my own experience, I just try to remember the good times and avoid staying bitter all the time.

I'm a staunch believer that everything happens for a reason. Though we can't exactly see it, there is light at the end of the tunnel.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mari Baptiste

1 Year Ago

The most painful part is when neither of you want to cut things off, but then you have no other choi.. read more

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Added on August 22, 2017
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Tags: Love, Pain, forced separation, poetry

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