Phone Call

Gone are the days when love was an acceptable reason to be with someone... It's all about status now...

Breathe in

Now, breathe out

"You'll be okay," 

My tears roll, and I continue to weep

I can hardly breathe

Breathe in

Breathe out

"Everything will be okay."

I hear his crying

On the other end of the line

I feel his tears

As if they are mine

We've fought hard for our love

But we've run out of time

He doesn't deserve this

Neither do I

I just can't understand

Why they couldn't see

That I loved him dearly

And that he loved me

How could they do this?

Do they even have hearts?

How heartless one must be

To pull two people apart!

Two people who loved each other

More than life itself

All because of an obsession

With looks!

Status!

Wealth!

Was our love not enough

For them to see?

To look past their fixation

On affluence and prestige?

We reminisce times we shared

For a few hours more

Times we laughed and smiled 

Before we knew the score

I promise to wait

And so does he

That this wasn't good bye,

We both agree

The time has come

To put down the call

As much as we'd want to

We couldn't further stall

I can't believe 

This is our last phone call

Breathe in

Breathe out 

Come on, deep breaths now

You'll be alright

"We'll meet again soon"

Author's Note

The dialogues in bold print are basically self pep talks.

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Mari,
It's just Richard dropping-in to check you out.
Nice piece, with a believable storyline, good flow, a rather smooth rhythm, nice rhymes, slant rhymes, and an easy presentation to follow.
Your emotional element hits deep, as does the relatability in unfortunate circumstance that would deprive two passionate lovers of their chance at true happiness.
Rivals Tristan & Isolde and Romeo & Juliet.

Beautifully done, M'Dear … never give-up hope where love is true.
My warmest hugs to You! ⁓ Richard 🌺

[Mari Baptiste]

Hello Richard :)
Thank you so much! This is actually my first time to do rhyming, so it's not really my best work so far. BUT, it's the most emotional one I've done (next to my other poem, Zenida). I'm glad you enjoyed the flow and the storyline. :)

Sad to say that this particular one is based on a true story. :(

[Richard🖌]

Well, Mari,
I thank you sincerely, too.
My heart is gently sad for you and your true love, m'dear. 😔
Let me say that, for your first rhyming effort, I'd say you've done a bit better than many others with far more experience at it … you show fine promise, and anytime you might wish it, I'd be most happy to lend a friendly helping hand. : )

[Mari Baptiste]

Thanks, Richard 🙂

I'll be sure to send you a message or a read request whenever. 😊 💖

[Richard🖌]

Please do, Mari ; )

[BlackPrince]

You have such a picturesque writing style.

Saying only what is necessary, you capture the precise emotions, and you are economical with words, with masterfulness of your craft, and an inherent intensity and passion.

I'm glad to have come across your words.
You are inspiring.

WELL DONE

[barleygirl]

Good job of mixing up the way your message is delivered. I like the self-talk intermissions & for the rest, your rhyme & rhythm flow well. I'm a little puzzled at how someone, anyone, could cause one of these lovers to break away from the other (it sounds like they have a good thing going, so why would the other one leave, even if someone pried him away?) I think there might be some cultural difference that I'm not understanding, becuz I would not be so sweet to this guy if he left me for status!?!? Anyhow, I'm impressed with your artful delivery even if I'm not fully understanding the way things went down with this couple (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Mari Baptiste]

I was actually forced by my grandmother to end things with him (personal touch there haha).

It was more because he wasn't of "the same social class" and what not. However, he and I are in the process of working things out. Just waiting for a few more years till I graduate and things should be a lot better. Still madly in love up to this day. :)

Thank you so much for reading my poems! *hugs*

Mari

[barleygirl]

Aha! Good to know! I like to understand the way other cultures & families interact. I'm glad to hear that this forsaken love is still alive & waiting for a chance to bloom again! *smile*

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of thoughts. Hard to be waiting for someone. Time go slowly and we think too much. I liked the realistic feel of the words. Thank you Mari for sharing the amazing words and thoughts.
Coyote

[Mari Baptiste]

It really is hard, buuuut love really can conquer all sorts of difficult circumstances. ❤️
read moreIt really is hard, buuuut love really can conquer all sorts of difficult circumstances. ❤️

Thank you for reading! 😊

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree my friend. Love is life and life is love.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Sad Romeo and Juliette as they are forced to part by families that do not understand their love or accept it. Beautifully described with very effective thought- speech style. Lovely form, flow, rhyme. Beautifully poignant. I hope they meet again

[Mari Baptiste]

Thank you, Annette. :)

I hope so too... :(

[Brent]

I can relate to your experience of love rejected. Your poem conveys the pain of breaking up, especially due to an outside factor. In my own experience, I just try to remember the good times and avoid staying bitter all the time.

I'm a staunch believer that everything happens for a reason. Though we can't exactly see it, there is light at the end of the tunnel.

[Mari Baptiste]

The most painful part is when neither of you want to cut things off, but then you have no other choice as of the moment but to do so... :(

Thank you for the review/advice, Brent. :)