Snapped

Snapped

A Poem by Mari Baptiste

My eyes widen 
Upon hearing a sound

A horrible...horrible sound...


Oh no...
Don't tell me...Please no!
This can't be!

I roll over and look down at the horrifying sight

My loyal companion throughout high school
My aid
My guide
My sight when I could not see!


Everything was a blur
Till you came into my life
You made everything so clear to me!


I pick up the pieces
And assess the situation
I'm completely mortified!

What am I to do?
The damage is done
Irreversible damage at that!

4 years together
Gone!

I pause for a moment
And then let out a laugh


Perhaps it's about time
I got a new pair of glasses


In loving memory of my broken pair of glasses, which I accidentally lied on as I was falling asleep.





© 2017 Mari Baptiste



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Clever tease and so very well written - brava! Minor point 'I accidentally lay on - otherwise perfect. You're sending me off and away with a grin ear to ear and back again!.

Posted 4 Months Ago


At first I was racking my brain thinking it was something that died or I don't know what. As it continued I started smiling and laughing. Thank you for the wonderful writing.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very much enjoyed that, and though short it made me ask many questions just like a book. Thanks for the read!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I thoroughly enjoyed this, The rhythm although unique was easy to follow, and the reveal at the end was executed perfectly. Great Job

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is good writing. You wrote it, in such a way that it had the audience truly wondering what you were talking about, or who? I liked it. It made me laugh.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A (dare I say it) 'SPECtacular' poetic composition of humorous intent - also highlights the pitfalls of falling asleep whist reading in bed! Love it ... [:-)

Posted 9 Months Ago


Mari Baptiste

9 Months Ago

Thank you! :)
I was so looking forward to our [my glasses and I] next chapter together at uni.. read more
Nicely done Mari. Great mystery until the end. There's a bit of wavering between tenses, but my over-riding feeling is I was hooked! Others also seem to like it!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mari Baptiste

9 Months Ago

Thanks, Nigel! :D
I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'll be more careful with the tenses. :)
Hahah this is funnily relatable! I've done that with my glasses too though thankfully I had spare ones lol
This gave me a good laugh so thank you for that! Nicely penned! (:

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

I would say contacts are kinda better than specs ;P
You're welcome, Mari (:
Mari Baptiste

9 Months Ago

It actually kinda is. I wear them everyday but I like to let my eyes relax whenever I stay home. :)
Dr YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Aye, me as well! ;)
you had me fooled as well..lol
well done!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Mari Baptiste

9 Months Ago

Thank you, Stella! :D
Those glasses got me through 4 years worth of essays, exams, and homewo.. read more
Ha! What a great comedic poem. I had no idea until the end that it was about a pair if glasses. I was expecting much worse! Very Clever my friend!

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mari Baptiste

10 Months Ago

Glad you had a good laugh, Annette. :)
I was absolutely devastated. The hinge snapped right .. read more

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Added on August 27, 2017
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I discovered my passion for writing a little bit later compared to other writers my age. Most of them start at around 13 or 14. I only started at 17. My teachers told me that I had a knack for writing.. more..

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