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Sand and Wind

Sand and Wind

A Poem by Marina

Where is your jacket? 
I didn't feel like wearing one today. 
I see. Give me your hand. 
Let's go for a walk. 
What's happening to you? 
Nothing what do you mean? 
Your hand disappeared, I only have sand in my fingers.
Oh that's because the wind is blowing. 
I should have stayed in. 
Are you going to disappear? 
Yes. 
What if I hold you tighter? 
Don't you know what happens to sand when you hold it tight? 
What can I do then? 
Nothing. You can just enjoy the moment. 
But now your whole left side is gone. 
And soon the other one. 
Give me a kiss. 
I would like to but I'm afraid I'll break you. 
Perhaps I'll break you. 

The wind blew harder and his heart broke. 


© 2017 Marina



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enjoyed this at first I thought it was like he was walking with someone passed on.
very good poem

Posted 10 Months Ago


That is a enchanting poem. Enjoyed each word. Thanks.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Marina

11 Months Ago

My pleasure Dwayne! Thank you :)
Beautiful, haunting poem. Disturbing but brilliantly true metaphor. Life is transient, love is transient. We try to hold onto people we love, but they pass through our fingers like sand-"Do you know what happens to sand when you hold it tight?"...Love this.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Marina

1 Year Ago

Thank you Annette. I thought sand and wind as elements would represent best the transient nature of .. read more
lovely. the conversation is very straightforward and blunt. I like that you used the sand and the wind, a force we can't control and a very delicate and helpless being, but it's not a sad story just very matter of fact. I like it

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marina

1 Year Ago

Thanks em. That's what I was going for, I'm happy it's seen that way!
Funny how you read something again.
Now I'm thinking the end of the world.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Paul Bell

1 Year Ago

You never walked into the wall twice. It felt like the end of the world. Who puts a wall right outsi.. read more
Marina

1 Year Ago

Only someone who'd want you to think it's a dead end so you'll have to go back in the bar again. It'.. read more
Paul Bell

1 Year Ago

It is, i did. lol
Grab at the sand and it will flow through your fingers. Leave it alone and it will blow on your face.
I just love the last line that you have cancelled.....
That is the harsh truth.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marina

1 Year Ago

Words of wisdom. Thank you Shabeeh.
Dear Marina. A sad journey in your poem. Type of poetry that must be read again. You made the scene and flow of thoughts come alive for the reader. The ending left me with the need to read and know more. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


Marina

1 Year Ago

Thank you for your words Coyote. Happy to hear that it had such an impact on you.
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

A well written poem and you are welcome Marina.
Heartbreakingly beautiful. Wow. I got chills haha.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Marina

1 Year Ago

Thank you Nicholas. Glad it had such an effect haha
Aw poor sand man. The one who got away.
But don't despair, i see a merman yonder.
Actually i see all sorts of weird people yonder.
Should i be concerned.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Marina

1 Year Ago

Yeah, you should be. There are all kinds of weirdos and I don't have that sand power. lol

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