Adulthood

At our childhood stream that once dwarfed the ocean, I find the banks collapsing on it's quiet side.

Reviews

[Jeannette Gaspard]

Beautiful. Used exactly as many words as you needed to.

[Reeti]

It is beautifully written. It gives an inevitable message that adulthood surpasses childhood in terms of time and social responsibility. The metaphorical use of words in so curt a line is remarkable. It reminds me of Frost's poem 'Stopping By Woods In A Snowy Evening' and its line-

"The woods are lovely, dark and deep.
But I have promises to keep,
And miles to go before I sleep,
And miles to go before I sleep."

[Louise]

This is the kind of single sentences I'd like to be able to write.

[That_Girl]

Wow... one sentence but it's... loud. Bold. I like it!

[Sean Patrick Gray]

Just this short thought made me feel about 13 different emotions. Well done.

[Apatheia]

This is really thoughtful but basic. I love it.

[Ruth]

This is awesome!!!
I am going to think on this more...brilliant xo

[eglantine]

nice. just purely nice. Great structure, illuminates the reaching to shore.

[Leslie Philibert]

I´ve worked through all the requests - Mark is a talented poet !