Not The Moth

I had decided to be 

the flame, not

the moth.

But who ever saw a flame

stealing sideways glances

in libraries,

or sighing in corners?

Who ever saw a flame bend

to anything

but the wind?

Reviews

[Crimson_Catastrophe]

It's deep in its simplicity.
Great piece

[Kristopher d. Taylor]

Ive read a few of your pieces and they are very good, my type of writing, its amazing that youve managed to maintain simplicity and not lose any form of depth. I also love the fact that you write about more than just the standard heartache/love poems.

[lirique]

very well written! i really enjoy the play on the figure of speech that you have employed - so unique!

the whole poem is thought provoking, in particular the last verse :)

[Arasinya Adora]

I like this play on concepts, and "figures of speech". I have yet to read another poem that uses that attraction of a moth to a flame in such a way, so I personally don't see any cliche, and am rather impressed. I would never have thought of this.

Alas, another piece I can relate to though. I know I have told myself this plenty of times, convincing myself to not give in, but I am a hopeless romantic, and the sighs escape me without avail, and even a good book sometimes can't keep me from glancing. But what can you do right?

The last stanza is my absolute favorite, and reaches an odd aching part inside me. "Who ever saw a flame bend
to anything
but the wind?"
So simple, but so heavy with emotion. I like that about your work, it is simple, but says a lot. Something that I've been trying to teach myself to do! I get too lost in the details maybe...
Anywho, this was also a wonderful piece, good sir! I am very much a fan I think. Not the greatest fan, but one none the less! Good job!

~Adora
xoxo

[lark]

second stanza's the best. redevelop the first and third to be less cliche. there's blunt for you.

[Allie]

It sounds like you are trying to stand on your own instead of being a follower. Great write, and this is definitely a piece to make me think. I have read it before, don't know why I didn't comment.