Some Darkness

Some Darkness

Who are you? Where did you come from?  Where are you going?

I don't know, but you know all these things.  Do you care?

No!  I don't, that's why I ask.  How would I.  I don't know you.

That is what you say, but it's not true.  You do, you know you do!

In your mind you have seen me.  A specter you do not wish to see.

Things long past, that is it.  A secret you have hidden from others.

I have no secrets!  Look on the white pages of my life's story.

The pages are white, but there are dark smudges all about.

I know who you are, where you came from, where you are going?

Reviews

[Karen Redburn]

Definitely feel the darkness creep in this one. Something that, although on surface all is well, it is a dark bit which permeates the white pages. I like this one as I tend to lean toward that bit of intrigue in poems and stories. Cheers!

[sette]

this is a beautiful poem it speaks about oneself, the value and respect given to oneself. why it is important to love oneself first before others.

[Cherrie Palmer]

... the non-you that lurks in the shadow of decisions. Never receiving satisfaction but then never laid to rest. A Unique angle, I like it.

[Great Aunt Astri]

Ooooooo, quite spooky! That dark voice of all the ills you haven't quite done, but were lurking there, somewhere in the dark smudges! It is self-rebuking, I think. My self-rebuking is usually about all those things I should have done, but haven't. When the voice says in the last line, 'I know who you are, where you came from and where you going', perhaps we should welcome it, accept it , and then ignore it. Good for you for writing this 'dark' poem!! Loved it!!!

[barleygirl]

I love this mysterious message, so different from your usual sensual lyrical writing! There are aspects of this questioning that can be applied to either of our lives, I believe. There are just some people in life that we "know" instantly becuz their point of view is compatible & their life experiences have struck similar notes (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[KCthelastboyscout]

A little darker tone for you.hard to interpret its real meaning.something close to death or maybe your inner demons.maybe I'm way off track.I like the change up tho.