the break
A Poem by
Mary C
The final break,
(not sharp and crisp
as I imagined
but twisted
and bent )
seizes up,
and I hear myself,
like a thousand
cicada stridently
repeating reasons
while, moth-like,
you beat yourself
against my door.
Let me in
Let me in
Let me in
Let me in
Let me in
© 2011 Mary C
Reviews
A bending... Yes, this is more accurate most of the time.
I like the perspective you write with here.
So casual, yet very stern and steely.
Posted 9 Years Ago
short but well written. :) it's haunting me.. it's kinda creepy, but in a strange way. great job on this!! ^_^
Posted 12 Years Ago
short but well written. :) it's haunting me.. it's kinda creepy, but in a strange way. great job on this!! ^_^
Great poem, you express emotions in simple powerful language,it`s the kind of poetry I like,poems that are not overworked but describe universal situations and then suddenly deliever a real strong metaphor.Well done.
Posted 12 Years Ago
Great poem, you express emotions in simple powerful language,it`s the kind of poetry I like,poems that are not overworked but describe universal situations and then suddenly deliever a real strong metaphor.Well done.
Really powerful but very good. Nice work.
XD
Posted 12 Years Ago
Really powerful but very good. Nice work.
XD
Nice write!
Posted 12 Years Ago
Nice write!
Very, very strong...
Posted 12 Years Ago
Very, very strong...
So few lines composed a powerful punch in a well written poem!
Posted 12 Years Ago
So few lines composed a powerful punch in a well written poem!
My one suggestion is to use the parenthesis differently. Other than that, very nice.
Posted 12 Years Ago
My one suggestion is to use the parenthesis differently. Other than that, very nice.
Heh! Let me read this again
Posted 12 Years Ago
Heh! Let me read this again
wwwwhoooaaa... very intense!! nicely penned!!
Posted 12 Years Ago
wwwwhoooaaa... very intense!! nicely penned!!
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Added on December 3, 2011
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Mary C London, Ontario, Canada
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A simple woman, getting older and hopefully wiser. 4 lovely kids, two sons, two daughters. Like to write, paint and play music...that is all I can think of for now :-)
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