Holy High Roller

Holy High Roller

 

Holy High Roller, why do you put your faith in me?

I’m one bad draw from the dealer, one Jack, Queen, or King.

I’m just a high card away from becoming a bust.

So what have I done to gain so much of your trust?

 

Godly Gamblin’ Man, why do you place your bets on me?

I’m more than likely a long shot, much less of a sure thing.

Do you think you can beat the odds, spin this frail straw into gold?

Hit a gut shot on the river, or will you be forced to fold?

 

Righteous Risk Taker, why do you continue to believe?

I’m a two-faced chameleon, I could be red, black, or green.

Have you ever stopped to think, that it’s just not in the cards?

Do you really think you can hit the jackpot, pull three bells or three bars?

 

Divine Dare Devil, why do you think I'll win redemption?

Don’t you fear these snake eyes? That I’ll end up sixes, not sevens?

The house  always wins, the odds are stacked in their favor.

So just cash out while you’re ahead, because I am nobody’s savior.

 

Spin the wheel, cast the die

Go all in, let it ride

Pull the arm, win the prize

Deuces wild, aces high

Deal me in, check the line

Place your bets, one last time.

 

Just don’t blame it on me if I don’t come through.

You’ve got to realize I’m only human, even if it costs you.

Author's Note

This is another poem that came about because it was the only form that really fit the idea I had. Both of my poems have started as just a few lines that I've liked and the feelings and emotions with them, but always become a far cry from what I intended. That's not to say I'm unhappy with how they've turned out, I just don't think they are what I wanted to say.

Only question I have is if I should keep the last 8 lines or end the poem after the 4th Quatrain?

Reviews

[Barbara Walker]

What great rhythm and rhyme! I'd end it after the fifth quatrain.

[D. Pesek]

As a gambling man myself I loved this poem. My favorite part was how you started off each quatrain using a different alliteration. That was awesome. This piece flowed really well and was fun to read. As for where to end the poem, I liked 6 of the last 8 lines. The final two just weren't as powerful to me. The 6 before that though were great because they quickened the pace of the piece, creating some of the same feelings that gambling does (excitement, urgency, etc.)

Well done, I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

[Priscilla Sayers]

Lovethe metaphors and play on words. An exquisite write! A pleasure to read.
I love the last 8 lines!
I gives the poem spunk! I do love spunk, yet you are the artist so the choice is always yours. Reread and determine if it is how you want it to end. I think it ends with perfection!