Wonder Why We Call You W***e

Cry all you please you f*****g tease
Get on your knees and use your mouth
Taste what hate's about

 

Please do
Bend over b***h

 

Open your mouth
And use those lips
For something other than
Talking s**t

 

Skank this ain't heart break yet

 

Your fucked up from the head down
Your next scream won't be a love sound

 

You'll see through gouged out eyes
I'll laugh as your soul cries

 

You pray he doesn't fall in love with me

I never wanted him

So b***h, please

 

Just bend over
That's all you can do

 

The only time your pretty
Is when you're broken in two.

 

You picked the wrong time to drop your heart
B***h this pain is just the start

 

Let your tits hang out
Cause THATS what love's about

 

You wonder why they call you w***e
But we all know
It's cause your nothing more
Than the f**k buddy next door

Reviews

[Devons]

This has a perversely titillating effect, though the imagining may be somewhat brutal and bitter. The sexual connotations combined with the depiction of violent revenge and taunting a victim at mercy make the poem into a double-edged sword in a sense. In fact, the way the scene is played out is rather like 'paying back in kind'... "JUST BEND OVER
That's all you CAN do"
...Puts the 'victim' in the assumed sexual position of the w***e. Divine retribution is what comes to mind, and through this the meat of the words and message is set alight. The fierceness of the language is alive with feeling, and conveys a sense of power and humour that echoes through the first-person perspective of the writing; and the characters involved in this nasty little scene are easy to imagine as a result.
"Let your tits hang out
Cause THATS what love's about"
The above lines are stand-out; pithy, bitchy, harsh, and funny. They typify the entertaining and involving nature of this work. The last verse is a forceful and satisfying conclusion which reflects the whole feeling of the poem. The words, like the actions, are like a summary execution. A character assassination. I think we all know people like this, and indeed many may well have been in or imagined being in a situation like this, it is universal. Really enjoyable.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

incredible flare of overwhelming (in an exotic and captivating way) of venom~ I saw this more as from the view of the bitter girl who has flipped the view~ and is penetrating the conscious haze of men who value a woman as no more than the descriptives above with her dagger of ire presented in words~ powerful writing~
and thank you for the submission~ =)~

[Kes]

Ha! Great! I love hate poems! Is that bad? You're an outstanding writer, no word of a lie!
Perfectly blunt and almost sadistic. Great write, great read.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Many girls are like this .. and this is a good poem of why they are called these names..
Powerful words.. good write..

Chloe

[Tony Russo]

this is really good - I really like how you closed it out with a final dagger that wrapped up the whole poem well

[X_Emo_Princess_X]

This was really good! Amazing write wow. You can feel the anger in this poem. Love it!

[Ruth]

Excellent use of releasing angst:)
All I can say is go girl lol
xx

[Antonio Valentino]

The world hath no fury as a... well we all know the rest yes? I ususally write about the other side of love's coin, but this was, the romance of hatred.

Pretty stunning, with a perfect blend of shock value, and yet, these feelings are real, and felt, everyday.

Pretty brilliant.
Antonio

[Angel's Lady]

Oh snap! Somebody has pissed you off but good! Write about it, girl! Tell 'em!

Good job!

[Lighthouse Call]

Stone cold words, used when needed. Stone cold heart, almost bleeded.
Said with passion, although its hate. Did well to speak, and not carry, all the weight.

[Stammers]

We've all been here, but then, we're not all able to express it as clearly and as sharply as you do. Your words cut like a knife, they're solid and sure, can't wait to see what else you post. Bold and brave post.

'Let your tits hang out
Cause THATS what love's about'