Wonder Why We Call You W***e

Cry all you please you f*****g tease
Get on your knees and use your mouth
Taste what hate's about

 

Please do
Bend over b***h

 

Open your mouth
And use those lips
For something other than
Talking s**t

 

Skank this ain't heart break yet

 

Your fucked up from the head down
Your next scream won't be a love sound

 

You'll see through gouged out eyes
I'll laugh as your soul cries

 

You pray he doesn't fall in love with me

I never wanted him

So b***h, please

 

Just bend over
That's all you can do

 

The only time your pretty
Is when you're broken in two.

 

You picked the wrong time to drop your heart
B***h this pain is just the start

 

Let your tits hang out
Cause THATS what love's about

 

You wonder why they call you w***e
But we all know
It's cause your nothing more
Than the f**k buddy next door

Reviews

[Devons]

This has a perversely titillating effect, though the imagining may be somewhat brutal and bitter. The sexual connotations combined with the depiction of violent revenge and taunting a victim at mercy make the poem into a double-edged sword in a sense. In fact, the way the scene is played out is rather like 'paying back in kind'... "JUST BEND OVER
That's all you CAN do"
...Puts the 'victim' in the assumed sexual position of the w***e. Divine retribution is what comes to mind, and through this the meat of the words and message is set alight. The fierceness of the language is alive with feeling, and conveys a sense of power and humour that echoes through the first-person perspective of the writing; and the characters involved in this nasty little scene are easy to imagine as a result.
"Let your tits hang out
Cause THATS what love's about"
The above lines are stand-out; pithy, bitchy, harsh, and funny. They typify the entertaining and involving nature of this work. The last verse is a forceful and satisfying conclusion which reflects the whole feeling of the poem. The words, like the actions, are like a summary execution. A character assassination. I think we all know people like this, and indeed many may well have been in or imagined being in a situation like this, it is universal. Really enjoyable.

[.ronald.039.]

Thanks for the review. I checked out your stuff and I especially liked this one. It's just so brutally honest. It's not prettied up with flowery language. It's direct and that's why it resonates.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is direct and the story hard and straight to the point. No wasted words. You set-up the story early and made it stronger with each line. I like the ending. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[TadKent]

INTENSE. Awesome. Haha.