Cadence

in my anthology, Mary has accepted her pregnancy and invites her loved ones to share in her happiness

Cadence

 

Twilight, and the moon is rising

Bliss fills my heart and soul

Love within me

Starts the rhythm      

stepping, skipping

spinning, swirling

Who will dance with me?

 

Oh Dear Mother! Mother mine!

Trust my Sacred Destiny

            touch my belly

            feel His rhythm

Love unbridled

sets the tempo

Will you dance with me?

 

Joseph, Joseph, come stand with me

Take my hand- you have my heart

            kiss my belly

            feel Him moving

            love my Baby 

            be my Husband

            Will you dance with me?

 

Elizabeth, your eyes assure me

That you share my Destiny 

            pat my belly

to the  rhythm

stepping, skipping

spinning, swirling

How you dance with me!

 

Morning breaks, the sun is rising

Sacred beacon of the day

            Ecstasy

            stirs within me

pulsing, pulsing

Sacred Cadence

He will dance with me! 

Reviews

[APOORVA]

aah, an interesting one.
to mention, you a captivater

[Mary]

Thank you Apoorva, for your kind review. Happy you enjoyed it. :-)

[Valentine]

Being a Christian with Jewish forefathers, I may see things a little different than you. I love the flow of your write, and knowing she had no relations with a man but was pregnant, how could she doubt who the Father was? Valentine

[Mary]

Thank you, Valentine, for your review. I'm happy you like the flow- I also was raised christian and I have a great devotion to Mary, the mother of Jesus. in my "Mary" poems, this great woman represents "Everywoman". I write from a completely human point of view, trying to get into the head and heart of a teenager trying to explain a divine pregnancy to her family. My poems are not at all meant to be theologically correct, rather they might be entries into a young girl-teen-woman's journal. If you get a chance, I'd love your input on any others.

[steppenwolf]

I think I just read the final poem in your cycle of Mary and her pregnancy. Again, gives a wonderful blend of joy, her happy acceptance of her role, and her hope that all will share.

[Mary]

thanks, Steppenwolf, for reading

[Emily B]

this is gorgeous love the circular feel of the rhythm

[Mary]

thanks, Emily. I imagine there had to come a point in Mary's life when she embraced wholeheartedly her pregnancy, and invited everyone to be a part of this dance, this journey into the unknown

[Mary]

because she WILL dance

[Emily B]

what a beautiful dance it will be!

[RachelReaper]

I love the parallel structure you set up within each stanza and talked about the different people in Mary's life and what she may have been thinking/feeling about them at that time. Very nice, keep it up!

[Mary]

Thanks, Rachel for your kind review. She sends an open invitation to dance with her into the unknown, the uncharted area of raising the god-child

[MaryBee]

Love this :)

[icaros13]

I like this. I'm a classic poetry nerd, and this has a nice classic ring and feel. I really enjoyed your last stanza. It is an artful and appropriate ending that ties it all together. Very good write.

[gombeggar]

nice word structure...nice visuals

[Marie]

This is quite lovely. I like to think of Mary's joy when she knew she carried God's child...for hers was such bitter sorrow in later years...

[Ink Angel]

I think this is very well writtern, such beautiful words, feel him moving love this verse. Thank you :)