Would you tell?

Would you tell?

A Poem by Mehameha
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Acceptance of Trials

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If you floated across time
saw yourself before you fell
that youthful instant in your climb
would you tell?

If you grab your shirttails hard
jerk your brain back to your shell
this time playing the right card
would you tell?

If the blunder turned to bliss
every aspect smooth and well
trouble failing but to kiss
would you tell?

If you saw yourself grow old
now so pure you wished you'd fell
and too weak to keep your gold
would you tell?

If you knew it was the pain
the makes every day a sell
For with none you never gain
would you tell?



 

 


 


 
 
 

 

© 2017 Mehameha



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I loved this poem. I do like poetry that ask questions.
"If the blunder turned to bliss
every aspect smooth and well
trouble failing but to kiss
would you tell?"
If blunder lead to kiss. Maybe blunder, not so bad. Thank you my friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mehameha

7 Months Ago

Thanks my friend, I hope you are doing well. I apologize for my absence. Been working on guitar for .. read more
Coyote Poetry

7 Months Ago

I'm glad you are keeping busy and you are welcome my friend.



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Very nicely done. Very well put. I like the repeat of would you tell. I like the way you show a tempting vision of reasons why, and then gradually flip it. Good work! BRs Nigel

Posted 6 Months Ago


Mehameha

6 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and commenting. I would still change a few minor things, but the big flops wis.. read more
I liked this a lot, many trials we go through and wonder why? but in life's great tapestry we only see the messy side, not the beauty that unfolds on the other side - good stuff, :)

Posted 6 Months Ago


Mehameha

6 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and commenting. I've been watching too many Sci-Fi time travel stuff and as ro.. read more
Whatever, however, someone suffers : can be something small that's merely a nuisance but, can be something so vast, the mind waits for a tsunami to drown its existence. It's what life does, throws so much tragedy, too often leaving scars inside and out. But reading again,, i wonder, perhaps people should stop being so stoical as to slowly kill their minds with grief, fear, perhaps plain stubborness. Would you stand by and watch someone you care about, suffer? Dear Lord, I hope not. So what's with the 'If .. would you tell? My answer has to be, 'Why not - why not tell?'

Your words are gently emotional.. perhaps its the calmness of their style. Maybe its the acceptance of how it is.. for you.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Mehameha

6 Months Ago

Yes, the subject is accepting of the the tragedy and is now contemplating that if given the chance a.. read more
emmajoy

6 Months Ago

Many thanks for further explaining your thoughts
I admire your imagination in thinking of an original way to craft such a pondering, questioning message. The various scenarios you paint so well in each stanza are recognizable life experiences & the questioning refrain gives it a haunting quality like regret feels. Great job with rhyme & rhythm, too.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Mehameha

7 Months Ago

Thanks for your thoughts. I guess to me I clearly see the moments I would love to relive to my favor.. read more
barleygirl

7 Months Ago

Enjoying your continued share (above) . . . thanks for giving me more ideas of what's behind this me.. read more
i accept that i am growing old, but i'll never tell...that is my secret. :)))

Posted 7 Months Ago


Mehameha

7 Months Ago

Thank you. You are right for sure. Sorry for long absence. I've been working on guitar a big virtuos.. read more
Nicely set and can be applied to so many different ideas but still cohesive.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Mehameha

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reviewing and commenting. The lies we tell ourselves for the scars we earn. Still if n.. read more
I loved this poem. I do like poetry that ask questions.
"If the blunder turned to bliss
every aspect smooth and well
trouble failing but to kiss
would you tell?"
If blunder lead to kiss. Maybe blunder, not so bad. Thank you my friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mehameha

7 Months Ago

Thanks my friend, I hope you are doing well. I apologize for my absence. Been working on guitar for .. read more
Coyote Poetry

7 Months Ago

I'm glad you are keeping busy and you are welcome my friend.

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