The Lake Upon The Mountains

The Lake Upon The Mountains

A Poem by Mehul Rwat
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I like to observe nature and natural beauty. Moreover I have been to some good scenic places. Therefore, it often finds place as a topic of my amateur poems... Well I live on a lake city.. D;

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The Lake Upon The Mountains was as emerald
as it can be,
With shades of ocean blue and ocean green
as far as one can see.


'Twas surrounded with hill tops enshrouded with
floating silver fog,
With little marshes here or there and
here or there a bog.

A mischievous river took the excess water 
swiftly down the hill,
But even then the mighty lake had 
more water still!

For nineteen brooks and two small streams
always ran down to it,
Adding to whatever it had in plenty though
just bit by bit.

Along the lake and over the hill were forests
lush green and fine,
With sturdy Sal thick Cedar and The
Old Tree Pine.

I once went there with my friends and you
 already know what I saw,
Everything was green and fine as if that 
was the only law!

There are hills and fog, marshes and bogs,rivers,
waterfalls and fountains,
But the only thing to be seen first will surely be
The Lake Upon The Mountains.

© 2011 Mehul Rwat


Author's Note

Mehul Rwat
Please if you like this poem can you please tell which two lines are the best...THANKS!!

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i really like these lines:
"Along the lake and over the hill were forests
lush green and fine,
With sturdy Sal thick Cedar and The
Old Tree Pine."
you really write well..i can see that:)
i also love nature..its beauty..
moving to different places with friends..
you are almost there..you just need time to improve..
keep writing:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Very, very mature writing. However, it could use more perfectly written form and a wee bit more descriptive essence. It has great rhyme scheme, but it needs more fineness in style. Very good, good job.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Mehul Rwat

11 Years Ago

Thanks for giving your time to my poem.. Well it was the first one I decided to put up here.. it has.. read more
u know i like ur poetry... every line
great effort

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is a beautiful poem. The first 2 lines are my favorite. Great job on this write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


The last two lines are my favourites. *Smile* It's so joyful and beautiful and, of course, I'm a sucker for rhymes.

Posted 12 Years Ago


It is as good as any of your poems. I have read all.
My favourite lines are:-
"Along the lake and over the hill were forests
lush green and fine,
With sturdy Sal thick Cedar and The
Old Tree Pine."

Posted 12 Years Ago


I loved this poem because of how it rhymed and because of how I was able to imagine everything inside my head.
I really liked these lines:
A mischievous river took the excess water

swiftly down the hill,

But even then the mighty lake had

more water still!

Great Job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


My Dear Writing Friend,
I felt the below verse made this poem jump.

Blessings, Laughing-Bear

'Twas surrounded with hill tops enshrouded with
floating silver fog,
With little marshes here or there and
here or there a bog.


Posted 12 Years Ago



My Dear Writing Friend,
You have with great skill painted a word picture that can be seen so very clearly. There is something about a lake, like a fire, begs one to just sit and stare into it by the hour. I hope you some day live on a lake city! Well written.

Blessings, Laughing-Bear


Posted 12 Years Ago


Lovable and beautiful. Picturesque!!!!

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Mehul Rwat
Mehul Rwat

Nainital, Kumaon, India



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I am not a professional writer but one that is trying to come up as a good amateur writer who likes all types of writing genres. Writing is my hobby. I like to write specially on nature and it's beaut.. more..

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