Bottled Essence

The lids are loosened just enough

 for the salty essence to escape.

The feelings that were bottled years ago

burst forth to show themselves,

only to be wiped away with tissue

and thrown into the garbage.

 

Reviews

[jen -- JG]

So true here - we bottle everything up - holding on to it long past its use by date and yet when the dam finally bursts, we put it where we should have let it go in the first place - into the rubbish.

We are crazy creatures - but always seem to get it right in the end.

Love this poem and the pic sets it off very well.

Cheers

jen-JG

[.Bunnie.]

I think a lot is stated in this piece....but yet, there's still so much that's NOT stated. Clearly the narrator isn't speaking of crying in general--he/she's speaking of something that happened specifically in the past. Although I think it's fine as it stands now, a little more thrown into this wouldn't hurt. Either way, nice job. :)

[Jason Henry]

ive never heard tears spoken of like this...great composition

[Tania Leigh]

Cool play on words here....the reference to lids, of course is eyelids, but when followed by the mention "bottled up", it can easily escape the reader's attention that the speaker is talking about tears.

If negative emotions were so easily wiped away, I'd buy Kleenex by the caseload :-p

Very clever write! Thank you for entering the contest.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Yup! I agree...
Often we used to keep our emotions inside and hold them but finally a day come when they bursts..
And then it becomes too hard for us to handle that feel , So...its better to wipe tears than burning them inside!
I loved this write a lot(and the pic too :) )

[J.P.O.et]

This is an intewresting piece, different with your obvious visual
presentation also, sums up those tears that we bottle up untill the flood
Great artwork if it's yours also
J.P.O.et