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A Poem by Melany Garcia
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Thought of emotion

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I stare at this blank page
Wondering what to write,
Lost in thought
With no one in sight.
No one to love
No one to cherish
Trying to find myself before I perish.
I fill myself with sadness
 To fulfil my satisfaction.
I just stare in wonder
Figuring out how to seek happiness.
I'm filled with curiosity
No answers yet I seek
I seek for help in the enormencynn
But no thought was returned
I'm lost in a world of people 
Who cant see what's wrong
Nor find energy to ask
What wrong did gumcynn do with heo.

© 2017 Melany Garcia



Author's Note

Melany Garcia
enormencynn- human race, gumcynn- man kind, heo- She, perish- disappear.

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This is a better one. Even with the translations at the bottom, I found it a bit confusing, however, that's a very very petty note, for this poem actually gets the message better across than the last I read. The line "I just stare in wonder" somehow sounds a bit off, I can't put my finger on it, but it just sounded weird to me, and that line along with the proceeding one has minor musicality issues. But all in all, this is grand, and flows really well, and gets the point across in a great way. Well done!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Melany Garcia

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much :)



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I globally liked the text, but I agree with emipoemi, it can be a bit confusing even with the translations. Besides, perish doesn't really mean disappear but to die (most likely in a violent way).
But overall I really enjoyed it. The Old English words give the text some sort of Tolkien-ish dimension (which I like).
Thanks for sharing.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Melany Garcia

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much :)
This is a better one. Even with the translations at the bottom, I found it a bit confusing, however, that's a very very petty note, for this poem actually gets the message better across than the last I read. The line "I just stare in wonder" somehow sounds a bit off, I can't put my finger on it, but it just sounded weird to me, and that line along with the proceeding one has minor musicality issues. But all in all, this is grand, and flows really well, and gets the point across in a great way. Well done!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Melany Garcia

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much :)

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Added on July 19, 2017
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Tags: sadness, curiosity, lost

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Melany Garcia
Melany Garcia

Lake Worth, FL



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I love to write poetry It's a way to express how i truly feel without voice To show the pain and love i feel constantly Sometimes i think sadness is my satisfaction.. more..

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