Quiet Freedom

Short poem about a former slave overlooking a cemetery.

She stood upon the hill
Looking toward new neighbors
Thinking back amongst her past
Hardships, toils and labors.

Things had been unbearable
When she was a mere slave
She had longed for better life
Quiet freedom she did crave.

The world was black and white
In those oh so bitter days
Gritted teeth and faith in God
Helped endure the come what may.

Now this lonely piece of land
Is quite a different shade
As people of all color
Lay within their graves.

Author's Note

Please give an overall review on this short poem. Thank you!

Reviews

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Wow! Poignant and touching!
Slavery and racism are that prevalent parasites living on humanity that will consume everything living and deteriorate the soul.
Beautifully penned Melissa, I felt the vivid imagery with the pang of sadness.
Lovely write..!

[MelissaAndres]

Thank you, Jyoti!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome!

[Lasergraph]

I like this. An important story told with few words. Good job

[MelissaAndres]

Thank you, Lasergraph. I have gotten lots of nice compliments on this poem. I really appreciate it!

[Connie]

I liked this. well written, good job.

[MelissaAndres]

Thank you so much, Connie!

[annalysiar]

Powerful touching and true on past and current times very nicely done

[MelissaAndres]

Thank you again, annalysiar!

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I love the message you sing in this wonderful piece. Blood is the only color that matters :)

[MelissaAndres]

Very true, lynn! I appreciate you reading and commenting! :)

[Chris]

A sense of wistful... and incomplete. Felt like more wanted to be said but purposely wasn't.

[MelissaAndres]

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Chris. I appreciate it.

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A great piece of writing allowing us to consider the differences within our own cultures which have changed over the last number of decades...the double meaning of black and white days really stands out...beautifully written

[MelissaAndres]

Thank you, FT. I am glad you liked this. I just wanted to emphasize to the world (or whomever reads this piece) that we need to open our eyes and look at each individual and not skin alone.

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yes, indeed...great advice for the whole world :)...you are welcome

[MelissaAndres]

Thanks, again!

[Sami Khalil]

There is only one race and that is the human race even if we have different colors and shades. You did an absolute justice to this subject and summed it marvelously...:)....

[MelissaAndres]

Thank you, Sami! I appreciate your kind words so much and I agree with you - there is only one race and that is the human race!! Well said!

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome muchly...:)...............

[MelissaAndres]

:) Sami Khalil!

[Sami Khalil]

:)......................

[Cody]

This was gracious with the blood of Jesus Christ. This should be shown to all the brainwashed sheeple that think they are free as the wind but they are not. A fantastic poem

[MelissaAndres]

Thank you for reading and commenting, Cody. I appreciate it.

[Relic]

Its hard to imagine the brutality they went through if you weren't there. This reminds me a little bit of something I saw once about Abraham Lincoln walking through a cemetery after his passing and seeing all the freed slaves down below in a valley and walking off to join them. Well written piece here Melissa. :)

[MelissaAndres]

Thank you so much, Relic. I appreciate your reading and commenting. I am working on a novel now titled, 'Hush' that expands on this poem if you would ever like to read it. I have most of it posted.

[Relic]

Perhaps someday I will. :)

[MelissaAndres]

Not necessary but if you are ever so inclined I would welcome the feedback. Thanks again! Glad you enjoyed the poem. :)