Bizarre Dream

As the night wore on

I started to slumber

and into a bizarre dream

I did plunder

 

One of magic, wizards

and spells

great stone castles and wishing wells

 

Dragons rampaged

over the land

and knights and maidens

strolled hand in hand

 

but in the distance

there came a strange sight

space-aged things

shiny and bright

 

Mechanical robots

at beck and call

and metal buildings

incredibly tall

 

After the vision

had come to pass

all I saw

was space so vast

and darkness everywhere

 

 

Reviews

[Aria]

interesting interpretation of the past and present. At least, I think that is one way to look at this. The fantasy world with dragons is the past and the mechanical robnots and metal buildings are the cars, machines and skyscrapers of today. Or not. This was a simple piece with a lot of differetn vantage points the only thing that threw it off for me on a technical standpoint was the very last line. It seemed to not fit. Or, maybe i just read it funky but, it took the balance from that last stanza. Other than that, it was a good poem

[Carolin Meisner]

gillade den riktigt mycket!

tack for sharing

[Raven Wilson]

From past to present, it moved very well, and the darkness at the end seems to foreshadow destruction. Perhaps a subconcious...or concious thought of technology ending us all?

[Sianna Reader]

A fantastic poem and great imagery. I loved this work so much, the stanza's were descriptive and well written, I could see everything so clearly. However, the final stanza didn't seem to lure me in as the others did.

I enjoyed the poem very much!
Great job!
xxx

[CLUTZ]

wonderfully written......I like the images a lot, u did a great job

[Elizabeth Thief]

I like this, it's a very good poem
Great job!!