Boys with perfect jawlines always have dull eyes

Boys with perfect jawlines always have dull eyes

A Poem by Mia
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...and broken bones

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Dirty and perverted jokes, witty lines and poetry

Show me your broken bones

I bet you love their compliments

 

Never. getting it. Eat your dinner calm all together

Let them shine all your cutlery

Rest remains covered in their fingerprints

 

But I won’t judge them

Once I was them, there
It felt like something close to love

 

Eat your medium rare steak

Order some fancy wine

CEO’s will smile at you

 

For a moment you’ll feel self-worth

The shames on me

I coloured my nails black and you liked that

 

Smoking sexy for you

The desperate inhalation…watching the smoke

The look you’ve always wanted, never to receive

 

We’ll cut our skin just for scars

Something to remain

Something for them to kiss

 

I prefer you underneath me

Look up at my face

It’s as close as you’ll get

 

I love you, I love you not

I love you, I love you a lot less

But I will always dance with you in the dark


© 2013 Mia



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perfect men are not necessarily those who have...material things..

the ones with the sharp eyes...those are the men who feel, and create real feelings in the other person..

i like the idea of someone like that being used by the woman...being submissive to her..

he has money but no real power...makes us poor guys have hope...

love the last stanza, especially.

Posted 4 Years Ago


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Mia

4 Years Ago

Jacob you always have such great insight! Thank you, it’s always a pleasure to read your reviews



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Mia - OK. What can I add to these reviews? Nicely done. Indeed.

Love the last verse. On the other hand there is a time in a man's life when he will gladly take the "benefits" of being underneath!
:-)
Regards

Posted 4 Years Ago


Mia

4 Years Ago

I can imagine...hehe!
Thank you ever so much!
Wow Mia, why don't you tell us how you really feel, great 'pretty boy' piece of work here! Killer ending....

Posted 4 Years Ago


Mia

4 Years Ago

Shall I hold back next time ;)
Thanks Frieda!
Frieda P

4 Years Ago

Never, ever! ha, my pleasure! :-)
M...wonderful ending line. Well done...glad to be reading your material...bobc

Posted 4 Years Ago


Mia

4 Years Ago

Thank you Bobc, wonderful having you by
This is a moving piece, it's open and honest and has a brutal power to the voice that allowed me to fill the narrator's mind as I was reading, when in reality as a young man I'd be expected to relate to the man in the poem. The finale in particular was very, very strong indeed.
I'm glad to see you back Mia, you've been greatly missed. Welcome!! :)
-JB

Posted 4 Years Ago


Mia

4 Years Ago

JB, you're too wonderful for your own good!!! Thank you so much :)
Mia, this is power, girl! He is the pretty boy toy and he thinks he has it all. He gets what she gives him and he laps it right up. I read this 3 times. She takes what she needs from him, but I see her dissatisfaction. She wonders if there is someone who gets it, someone with sharp eyes. Love this. Angi~

Posted 4 Years Ago


Mia

4 Years Ago

Thank you Angi! You read this 3 times...I feel honoured!
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Pax
seems like a love-hate relationship... though not those with too over the top emotional outbreaks... this is just right amount of love and hate just to entice or spice up a relationship, i do like the ending of this piece, reminds me of a song... :)

very nice work Mia my friend..
ps ...smiles, welcome back my friend...


Posted 4 Years Ago


Mia

4 Years Ago

Thank you Pax! It's good to be back...big smiles! I missed the cafe :)
There is such a beautiful, bittersweet longing in your voice... the seeing of the soul through the scars. What a powerful, perfect rhythm that flows through.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Mia

4 Years Ago

Thank you Craig, I appreciate this!
... I prefer you underneath me... Oh wow, this is hot in a dark way, to have a man this way, the player getting a taste of his own medicine... It is sad though, that people like this who can have everything but won't see because of thier dull, lofty eyes, how empty is such a full material life. In a strange way, this is food for me, this deliciously powerful edgy write... Glad to see you again Mia!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Mia

4 Years Ago

Haha, eat it up! Thank you so much! I'm glad to be back :)
perfect men are not necessarily those who have...material things..

the ones with the sharp eyes...those are the men who feel, and create real feelings in the other person..

i like the idea of someone like that being used by the woman...being submissive to her..

he has money but no real power...makes us poor guys have hope...

love the last stanza, especially.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mia

4 Years Ago

Jacob you always have such great insight! Thank you, it’s always a pleasure to read your reviews
Poignant Mia full of conflict , love , love you not, love the title all beauty and no substance not judging once I was like them ... Great lines steak medium rare scares me! Lovely write

Posted 4 Years Ago


Mia

4 Years Ago

Thank you Moon! I'm with you on that...I prefer my food less bloody and more cooked :)

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