A Candle's Whisper

Flames that burn deep...

As the candle bleeds light.

Memories begin to take shape.

Perfumed Promises...

Sealed with passion kisses.

With the flames of lustfull bliss.

The needle prick,

kindles the fond memories.

As the tears of my heart cry out.

 

The days turn to nights.

As shadows play.

In a dark mist forest.

The ritual smoke...

is slowely inhaled.

The light guides spiritualy...

thru the astral plains.

Only to focus.

On the third demension.

 

My head hangs low

As I'm burned at the stake.

By the choices I make.

 

Reviews

[Angelic Darkness]

I like this mystical, spiritual write.
You've captured different visions..maybe, the
past, present, and future. We do make our own choices, and
we pay, but in the end, I feel we go through things for
a reason, a journey that only we can walk upon. Sorry,
I had to add my own little philosphy on it LOL!
In this line: The light guides spiritualy...
You misspelled spiritualy...and should be spiritually.
AD

[Gunny]

Very nice. I liked the feeling of remorse and regret I got off the wording and the poem as a whole. I liked it alot and I hope you continue to write more. ;)

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Nice twist at the end! I swear, man, your poems are getting better and better as I read on, one after another!

This one has some serious dark themes to it. It's really thought-provoking, I have to say, so I couldn't really pinpoint on what it's about exactly--well, all poems are like that, now that I think about it. :P

So much figurative language was used in this piece. It was just great! You started it out excellently with only a taste of the setting; candles! The first stanza also gives us a nice bit of depth in the main character. :) The second stanza is very mystical to me. At first, I thought the narrator was in Hell (as a state of mind, I mean). And then, the third and final stanza came along and everything just made pure sense to me! Really medieval, buddy!

I seriously loved this poem! You've taken a new level of perfection, man!