Spilled Memories

Living in memories...

 

 

 

I love the dark sad evenings of late

Autumn and Winter.

 Their moods of loneliness and melancholy,

lonely but full of joy.

I write by candle light,

sitting on the edge of my bed.

Shut off from the world in deep twilight,

sunk in a dream of my own.

Sleep well...

I will not wake you...

there you lay beautiful and quiet.

"I love you".

Your presence in my heart drives me crazy.

Wrapped deep in my thoughts,

my vision becomes one with my surroundings.

The world around me becomes silent.

All I feel is Winters touch against my skin. 

With smells of burnt wood.

I cherish these times when life stands still.

Living with my memories,

and being lost without them.

Wondering when it will all come to an end.

People call out to me,

but their words don't reach me.

My body is just transportation for my soul.

Living in solitude doesn't hurt.

Happiness comes when you feel right,

with whats going on around you.

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Reviews

[Rain]

Hi Michael..
Man, you have the exact sentiments about late fall and winter, as I do. Winter is my time to quit filming, and look back on my life. I use it's meloncholy moments to review my life. I have dreamed some of my greatest dream in this season of sleep. This is a wonderful piece, really capturing the feel. I jusge a write simply on the way whether it makes me feel it. This one did. I liked it, alot. Rain

Just one minor spelling error..Their

[Rambling Prose]

A beautiful write indeed. I love the imagery your word choices painted & my mind's eye was lulled into this place of solitude. The graphic lent the perfect touch to a perfect poem.

Beautifully penned...

[Jacqueline]

You have a knack for story telling via poetry and you've got an impecable use of imagery. Great work.

[chris' girlfriend]

that is such a beautiful poem.

[Megan]

Wow, I loved this poem of yours, your sensory details really captured my imagination. I can definitely relate to those moments when you just stop and take your life in. For me those moments are rare and that's why they are so cherished. An awesome poem, thank you for sharing it!

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

This is softly sad beautifully done ,, lovely images .. a melancholia that seems almost inviting to me .. i enjoyed this .. well done ..

Chloe
xoxo

[THE BLACK SEAL]

this is a very captivating read. i loved it

[Catrinka]

I write by candle light,

sitting on the edge of my bed.

Shut off from the world in deep twilight,

sunk in a dream of my own.

I really liked this poem! In particular, the part I copied above...that's often how I feel when I write because I'm a wake up at 4:00 AM and write about what made me wake up :-) Nice piece of work here

[Rhonda]

This peice is great! I love the way these thoughts are presented in a way that makes me feel the depth and honesty in them

My favorite lines are "Living with my memories, and being lost without them." I can relate.

Great job.

-R

[justjenn_2u]

Isolation can be beautiful with the serene splendor. No outside interferences, just pure thought energy flowing as in this poem!

[Kara Emily Krantz]

love this. those quiet, delicate moments... where we are with our Self, and are at peace. Those are my favorite. you described this really well.

i also liked how even though this is a moment of solitude for you, she is there...

"Sleep well...
I will not wake you...
there you lay beautiful and quiet."

That is gorgeous.

"Your presence in my heart drives me crazy."

A simple statement, and could even be considered trite; however, the way you wrote it was perfect, and it was anything but overused. it came off great.

really wonderful piece. the only thing that rang oddly to me was the word "sunk" that you used somewhere in there - i don't know i just noticed it because it didn't sit well. so you might want to consider that. it was just sort of a.. harsh, awkward word, and it didn't go with the rest of the piece.

beautiful. great write. made me want to write something similar to this :)

hugs