Gourmet Fish

Rain in this city
is splashing upon driveway and walkway.
Hands cup. Children sip.
Elders look out their windows wishing for
a better day to leave baked goods cool on the sill.
Can't hang out the washing.
The sky looks all dark and misunderstood.
The rain never drops alone, always in pairs, always in unison.
Lighting fires
Seeking snuggles
Pages turning.

Rain in this city
is splashing upon driveway and walkway.
Low rider clouds going off to work
finding their street of impression and expression.

Rain in this city
is splashing upon driveway and walkway.
She lifts her head looking above the tin roof.
They begin to fall.
Rain fish
Trout, Tuna, Perch, Bass, Red Snapper, and Tilapia.
Gourmet Fish!

Reviews

[annie lee]

I love this playful poem. You describe the reactions of different folks to the same rain, and I found that empathetic and evocative. The rhythm in the lines is an effortless cadence. I haven't read your haiku yet, but I know if you write haiku, eventually the rhythm pervades your thoughts and speech. This poem has a comfort to it too as you write of lighting fires, seeking snuggles and turning pages.
I find the last lines a happy surprise. A nice change from "raining cats and dogs."

[Zelle]

a fab write and awesome ending! loved it! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the thoughts and the tale in the poem. Rainy days do make our mind wonder and ponder many things. I like the surprise ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Astro]

Interesting take on the rain my friend. I especially liked the early part of the poem, where you highlight what goes on inside, while the fish hit the pavement so to speak. The line about rain never dropping alone, was strong and reeked of parables loosed from the mouths of shaman smoking their pipes.

[Wolfwind]

With rain like that, it would meen a seafood stew! =) This was a fun and descriptive flow of ink to read. I could just imagine the scene of fish falling from the sky as the lady looks up from her cozy nook of safety. Very well crafted!

Aaron

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

Hi, Michelle! Can I volunteer to be one of your word groupies? Also, can you point out a good spot to sit down on the ground, stare into the Northern Lights and exhale finality into eternity? Preferably, a place where prowling polar bears will (eventually) find my carcass a tasty snack (when I'm done with it, of course). Before I go though, I'd like some side dishes to go with this exquisitely yummy gourmet fish. What do you have in mind?

This ones going in my favorite recipe book in the "A" (for awesome) section. :)