Pushing Me Away

I have been toying around with various poetry forms, this one being my attempt at a VILLANELLE. I love this style, the rhyme and repetition give it a slightly neurotic feel and a sense of urgency. It often feels like a chant or a prayer of sorts. This pie

Doubting everything I do and testing everything I say

And though you claim you want us closer,

My love, you’re pushing me away

 

You fear your love I would betray,

Comparing me to those who didn’t stay you’re

Doubting everything I do and testing everything I say

 

I am tired of this game we play!

I love you but I’m tired of fighting,

My love, you’re pushing me away

 

And would you really love me if I stay

After my will is broken and I succumb to

Doubting everything I do and testing everything I say

 

Why do you torture us this way?

I’m not a saint but I am here and yours and still

My love, you’re pushing me away

 

And do you really love me anyway?

And can’t you see you are slowly killing us by

Doubting everything I do and testing everything I say

My love, you’re pushing me away

Reviews

[Wildecat]

This has to be tough to be pushed away, lost love is a difficult situation.

[Voltaire Mephisto (aka ..]

Being unsure of oneself and the person you are with can certainly kill a romance.

[JRB]

sounds like they pushed you away already, love lost was never found, nice write,
Jan/uisiom

[Tomás Ó C..]

Possessive love can destroy more than it creates, divides more than it unites...

[Areya Valena]

I love this, it sounds like it could be a song, great work, and i like this form of writing you used.