Take Back your Promises

You've changed my own features, made me live your lie, now take back all those promises you once made, and let me find myself.

Take Back your Promises


Alone in the stillness of the night

Staring at my face gazing back at me

Through the mirror… through the hazy light

I see a shadow of the woman I used to be…

I watch the wasted days of my life

Shoving off in my own eyes

Cold memories cut like a knife

As sharp as your chilling lies...

My love relentlessly misused

Fading in the grayness of your apathy

My dreams savagely abused

Shrilling… wailing for empathy

There are no more chances I want to take

No more oceans for us to sail

Making me believe anything was my mistake

My fault when anything should fail

There are no more roads for us to walk

No prospect for us to succeed

My heart you willfully broke

A miracle is what we’ll need

I won’t drown in my illusions anymore

Time has come to see the plain truth

Thinking it could ever be like before

Is wasting away my life and youth

You’ve put me on the run for quite so long 

Living in your deceiving delusion

Swaying in those foggy places amid right and wrong

I’ve reached nothing but loss and confusion

Astray… rolling in your circle in the sand

I’m always back to the point of start

I won’t search for reasons to understand

Why we are ending so far apart

You left me nothing but a heartache

And a heap of dreams thrown aside

So take back all the promises you’re yet to make

And give me back my wounded pride… ©

ღ MiRa ღ

Author's Note

Reviews

[KAin]

Strong work, emotion brilliantly expressed in this piece. Heartfelt words, that demand an honest reading of it, as well as an earnest understanding.
You've maintained your rhyme scheme well without losing the meaning in your message - sometimes that is a flaw among the writers of this site - so well done on managing to maintain the thread and power of your message throughout.
It has the feeling of a pride that has begun to remember itself, and to recognize that it deserved more than what it got.
Well written, Mira. Keep up the good work.

[Mira ThePoetess]

Thank you as usual your review is deep and filled with constructive positivity .. thank you

[Latifa]

My dreams savagely abused
what a strong line I like it a lot

[Mira ThePoetess]

Thank you a lot latifa .... appreciate it my friend :D

[Kasey Miriam]

This is written so very well. Thank you for sharing. I am glad this was sent as a requst for me to read

[Mira ThePoetess]

I appreciate you reading me ... thank you Kasey :D

[Oyindamola Shoola]

I love this...you have expressed pain and sadness in such a beautiful way...well penned

[Mira ThePoetess]

Thank you very much .. sometimes pain and sadness can bring out what we didn't know exist inside of us ..

[Leslie Philibert]

Lots of good rhymes, well written

[Mira ThePoetess]

Thank you Leslie appreciate your review

[MoriartyMesa]

A better man, a great entertainer once said in a film with the Chairman,
When your opponent's sittin' there holding all aces, there's only one thing left to do: Kick over the table.

Nice kick

[Mira ThePoetess]

it sure seems like the strangest review I ever had .... but it also makes a point ...... thank you for reading and commenting :D

[Rita L. Sev]

Really beautiful imagery here, Mira. A sad piece, but a cathartic read for anyone who's been there.

[Mira ThePoetess]

Thanks Rita .. sometimes sadness brings out some beauty hidden inside

[Lyn Anderson]

An outstanding truthful, empowering piece. One small thing, last stanza, I think you meant you've and not you're

[Mira ThePoetess]

Thank you for your review and glad you liked it ... about last stana no I've meant you'er as You are .. for I mean take back the promises you are yet to make ... you intend to make ... like we use yet in the future tense in {the best is yet to come} as it didn't happen yet ... so that's what I wanted to say .... the promises you're yet to make .. that you want to make me in the future ... Thanks for your comment I appreciate it. :D

[Lyn Anderson]

I see. well, a very good piece.

[Mira ThePoetess]

thank you for your review ... nice cat in the pic by the way :D

[Bright Ocean Star]

Mira, the flow is exceptional, the imagery beautiful and vivid. This is absolutely wonderful and sad to read, but beautifully penned. Thank you for sharing!

[Mira ThePoetess]

Thanks Bright Ocean Star ... it's funny how sadness can affect us positively ... it brings out words that touch those who know how to read with their heat ... Thank you again.

[WindSong]

This poem is simply amazing! I love it! It's well written, solid presentation. great rhyme scheme and imagery, as well! It's such a delight to read and absorb! Great writing!

[Mira ThePoetess]

Thank you so much for reading me. Words came out of my heart ... Appreciate your wonderful review and looking forward to reading your writing as well. :-)

[Mira ThePoetess]

Simply amazing. The emotion, pain and life rises up out of it towards my heart. Bravo

[Mira ThePoetess]

thank you for taking the time to read me ... appreciate your lovely review :D