Hand Prints On Flesh

I just wrote this one day in creative writing. I've had this inspiration for awhile but it finally came out =]

The bruises hide in plain sight...

The tears silently fall down my face

 

"I'm sorry," you cry, "it won't happen again."

 

SLAP!

 

The sound of flesh on flesh contact radiates throughout the room.

The usual ache of pain now has engulfed me in its crutches.

After the session I run for the bathroom.

 

What's new today?

-A black eye, bruises in the shape of hands around my arms....again...

I slowly strip until I"m left to face what has happened to me.

 

I'm living my worst nightmare..

My biggest fear has morphed into my reality.

The bruises are a multitude of different hues and sizes;

showing the pain i've been hiding for so long.

 

How could someone do this to the one they love?

How could I have gotten myself into this?

 

But more importantly

...Why do I keep silent?...

 

The darkness starts to creep into my vision.

A slight smile graces my lips,

As my familiar savior wraps me in his arms.

Author's Note

critisism please? I want to know what you think

Reviews

[Lorraine]

The ending is rather vague. I can't tell exactly who the savior is but the implication is insanely dark. Good imagery with the appropriate phasing and wording.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

The emotion was captured very very well...the reader is with the subject of the poem and you can almost feel the pain yourself..well written.

[Khaotic Katastrophe]

great, great use of words and imagery. i can't really catch the flow of this but im not big on flow myself. you controlled your emotion in a wonderful way. great write

[FatalRewind]

Dark, just dark. I never did see you as a Edgar Allan Poe type writer. And my opinion, it's poetry but sad and horrible. The sound of flesh on flesh, bruises, it's just sad.

[Comatose]

Ooooh!!!! This is so awesome! I loved the ending the most!!

[Natalie.]

Oooh! I love the ending so much! Creepy and powerful! good write, dude!