The Warpath

This is a song form Conner youngblood

This medicine is wearing thin now

We're bullet proof until we bleed out

And even though we always try to hide our

instinct from our pride 

In our struggle to survive we keep the warpath by our side. 

We strike the sky until the sun bows

And fly until our feathers burn out

All our live we've been apart 

A vicious cycle from the start 

In our struggle to survive we keep the warpath by our side.

Reviews

[emipoemi]

This is amazing!! Got a lot of juicy lines that simply intensify the wonder of the poem. My only critique is that Stanza 1 Line 3 has some musicality issues.... take out "try to" and just make it "hide our instinct...". Not only is it more active and more powerful, the musicality hits the right note, and it further makes the poem awesome. The refrain, as a final note, is golden. Well done!