Babylon

Babylon

A Poem by Ana B.

I’ve got one breath left. What to do with it….

From a whisper to a scream…one breath…

I’ve got this piece that doesn’t seem to fit

In this ocean with no bottom and no depth

 

Your heart’s a flicker to this flame…

A burning fire, heating me at night

Will I be able to stay sane…

When you promise to hold me tight?

 

Chasing snowflakes…again

Those who feel, can’t claim armistice

Chasing snowflakes…even in the rain…

Cause heart is war and love…a pacifist.

 

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© 2017 Ana B.



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A really powerful piece. All is fair in love and war and we are all soldiers of both. I particularly love the last stanza, as well as the use of ellipsis which to me construes a frustration involved with the emotions shown in this piece?

Posted 2 Years Ago


Ana B.

2 Years Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed it Willis, i am fond of ellipsis, don't think i have a poem without them....tha.. read more
Perfectly captured in painfully beautiful words. Thanks for sharing this.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Ana B.

2 Years Ago

thank you for reading
This is so beautifully written Ana. :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


Ana B.

2 Years Ago

thank you very much Lilith :)
first stanza, brilliant, second, brilliant, third, brilliant, one quality writing of the highest level, you never cease to amaze Ana, a poet of our times and the future as well :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


Ana B.

2 Years Ago

And you never cease to make me smile Richard, thank you for your review :)
A very good poem Ana! I really enjoyed it :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


Ana B.

2 Years Ago

Thanks Aaron!
A powerful poem.
"Chasing snowflakes…again
Those who feel, can’t claim armistice
Chasing snowflakes…even in the rain…
Cause heart is war and love…a pacifist."
People who know the true cost of war will become pacifist. Guns and bombs kill without caring if Muslim, Christian or any other belief. Thank you Ana for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


Ana B.

2 Years Ago

I understand what you mean, and i hope me and my (future) family will never know such things...
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

Me too. I hope my grandchildren can live in a world where peace and concern is the way.
Ana B.

2 Years Ago

Let's pray and do everything for that ;)
Will I be able to stay sane…
When you promise to hold me tight?

Brilliant as always and confessing the surrounding.
Great.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Ana B.

2 Years Ago

Thank you my dear for being so sweet :)
i like the opposites in play here, and how they are complementing each other...the heat, the cold, the war, the pacifist...
love puts our heart at war...it is never all peace and calm---maybe the scream for the last breath is the smartest road. At least it lets out the pent up emotions, either way.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Ana B.

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much Jacob.
consecutive description of flame and snowflake like arrival of war after love, liked it very much !

Posted 2 Years Ago


Ana B.

2 Years Ago

Thank you Abilash :)
There's such distinct truth in that final line; it made me pause, flash-think then nod - all in a trice!

You seem able to write about near everything, Ana, turning little thoughts into bigger ones with gentle and careful wondering. You're a person poet, you write for people who need that little extra from words.. 'Your heart's a flicker to this flame.. '

Posted 2 Years Ago


Ana B.

2 Years Ago

Thank you for the most wondeful review Emma:)
emmajoy

2 Years Ago

Truth and nothing but ..

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