Apathy

a WRATH compilation

Stars sink

In the mirage’s lake

Until the next blink

Of the tenet’s plague…

 

Dousing kingdoms

In Lethe’s resin

So that morality’s symptoms

Will wither and lessen…

 

So what if we are our own

Angels and demons,

Cannot listen to the baritone

Of those sinking stars’ grievance…

  

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Falcon1]

Its a wonderful write and your sharing them all makes me feel you're letting down your walls.

[Ana B.]

Thank you :)

[Tony Jordan]

whats the best way to walk through a-garden-y
Using a-path-y of course !!
xDD

[Ana B.]

hahah, damn, that's genius! Thank you :)

[Tony Jordan]

thats you rubbing off
:))

[Ana B.]

loooooooool

[barleygirl]

To me this is a whimsical message that could be related to "apathy" or it could just be a magic carpet ride thru the sky!?!? *smile* (Your artwork helps this idea along). Very much enjoy your word choices for fun sounds & rhyme as much as for meaning.

2nd stanza / 3rd line: I would delete "that" to enhance your rhyme & rhythm . . . just a thought.

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much for stopping by :)

[Ty]

'Baritone' absolutely jumped out of the page. Sure I'm missing something, but enticing, drenching shower of words.

[Ana B.]

Thank you Ty :)

[Michael G. Smith]

I love this masterpiece. It felt like an old soul speaking. It reminded me of poem I wrote titles "Sounds in Starfall".

[Ana B.]

Thank you for the beautiful words Michael :)

[Lemonade]

I enjoyed this. It felt pensive and didn't try, as many poems do, to take up more space than was warranted. Rather, it owned the space it was given and made it beautiful.

My favorite verse and the source of my only gripe:

"Dousing kingdoms
In the Lethe’s resin
So that morality’s symptoms
Will wither and lessen…"

Lethe is an entity, as I am sure you know, so the article 'the' preceding the name is unneeded. It would be like saying "the Zeus". The lines still flow together perfectly fine without that article, if not better.

After reading this through twice more, I have to say that I appreciate the use of symmetry in every verse ending with an ellipses. The beauty of poetry, in my opinion, lies not only with the words themselves, but in how they are tied together. Symmetry is an excellent vehicle for this.

[Ana B.]

Thank you for the thorough review Lemonade. I was actually thinking about Lethe's ''the'' so thanks for pointing it out. In fact, i'll edit it right away. Thanks again :)

[Lemonade]

Not at all. :)

I have to say, the way you transform your poetry into higher art through the use of music and paintings is really quite admirable. It adds a whole other dimension to the piece. Very admirable. You have excellent taste.

[Ana B.]

well, i always thought the music, the art, are the extension of this collective soul this earth seems to possess. Magic, in one word. :)

[Lemonade]

Well reasoned. I dare say you are correct. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem. You left me with many things to think about.
"So what if we are our own
Angels and demons,
Cannot listen to the baritone
Of those sinking stars’ grievance…"
I do believe. We decide if we are Angels or demons. Thank you Ana for sharing the outstanding poetry. Best poetry leave the reader with something to think about.
Coyote

[Ana B.]

Thank you for you review, John. I do believe we are own angels and demons, our mind fancies role playing :D

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree and you are welcome.

[Misery]

Once again, dear Ana, your rhymes precisely tap with the grace of a ballerina and the lightness of a feather.
I hang my head from my own ineptitude in the sweet gossamer glow of your exactitude. Your rhymes are things to behold.

[Ana B.]

Thank you for the wonderful words Kevin.

[Misery]

You are always welcome, dear Ana.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Now this has a different pitch from the first one I read...the witty of the write is what grabs you here...and the reader must catch the presence of this read...to really sink in the message of what you wrote to paper...in this case....computer screen...

[Ana B.]

Thank you for saying so, Glen :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...