Perfidy

Perfidy

A Poem by Ana B.

 

 

Life in its prime

To taste on the tip of my tongue

Need more salt and lime

while the storm is still young.

 

It’s quite shady

In my subatomic realm.

In the cherry moon’s gravy

I feel calm under its tide’s whelm

 

Infinitely judged by unqualified juries

And my Virtue - a continual stammerer;

And while Orestes is pursued by the Furies

dear Sadness - smile for the camera.

 

 


© 2017 Ana B.



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I really immersed myself, the second read. This is exquisite work.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Ana B.

1 Month Ago

Thank you Nipplegrinder (love that nickname by the way)
Nipplegrinder

1 Month Ago

Hehehe. Thank you, dear girl.
That last stanza was perfectly summarized. I enjoyed the reference to the Furies and Orestes whom is associated with madness. The joys of Greek mythology. I would have said Erinyes rather than Furies but that's just me, lol.

A beautiful ending to a somber poem. Very well done, Ana!

Posted 2 Months Ago


Ana B.

2 Months Ago

oh,i'm afraid i don't know him... i learned my mythology heroes in Russian i'm afraid...looong befor.. read more
Lovecraft

2 Months Ago

Check it out. Extremely detailed. Also includes Norse and Egyptian mythology along with Arthurian Le.. read more
Ana B.

2 Months Ago

will do, thanks!
First of all i am sorry . I didn't read this before and i regret for it now.
Beautiful work and rhyming so good.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Ana B.

2 Months Ago

Thank you Abraham :)
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Eloquent dance of words in rhythmic motion my friend.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Ana B.

2 Months Ago

Thank you :)
Whoa! This is unusual! I'm not relating to everything right away, but after reading it a couple more times, I'm impressed by the thought-provoking nature of what this says. My favorite line: "Infinitely judged by unqualified juries" which goes well with the title (which I had to google -- I love learning new words). Nice word crafting my friend!

Posted 3 Months Ago


Ana B.

3 Months Ago

Thank you for the amazing words my dear :)
Orestes's issue was madness and purification - this piece is sanely relaxing! Read it over a few times and just makes me chill out - great effect! Lovely share ... :-)

Posted 3 Months Ago


Ana B.

3 Months Ago

haha, thank you very much Phill :)
It's a good one, really, with depth and sadness. Someone who's stronger from inside than her apparent state that she's in. She's fighting a battle that can't be won. The title of this poem suggests some more insight. A good read I must say :)

Posted 3 Months Ago


Ana B.

3 Months Ago

I like your insight. Thank you :)
I judge this to be alright... but I'm not really qualified. I dig the music a lot... it's a good fit.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Ana B.

3 Months Ago

lol, nice pic. I'm glad you stopped by.
Dead Alive Dave

3 Months Ago

It's was my pleasure.
I am very impressed with your creativity!

Posted 3 Months Ago


Ana B.

3 Months Ago

Thank you SA :)
Beautiful music, check, stunning wordplay, check...

*Infinitely judged by unqualified juries
And my Virtue - a continual stammerer*

Could not have written a better line if yeh paid meh... (I am def' stealing its core idea, lol)

Overall... Mind-blown...

Truly inspired piece, Ana... Will have me questioning verbal loopholes for days to come...

Posted 3 Months Ago


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Ana B.

3 Months Ago

haha, thank you for the kind words Silente :) Yeah, use whichever line you want, or idea hehe, and y.. read more

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