The Light Above

An attempt to write while feeling lonely. I scrapped it, found it again and posted. picture by modtoddinc 2011

The Light Above

by Todd R. Joslyn

An Envelope

Underneath this paper thin moon

I hold your voice in my whispering hands

These white folds bleed yesterday's choices and,

Glossy memories stare at me through fog filled eyes

Sometimes I think about jumping…

Into your soul no matter how deep, dark and scary the fall

From the inside out, and the bottom up; backwards, forwards, and every side complete

Until that time when recognition arrives and the bridge is revealed;

I will cross over then, whether mountains, or valleys; I will sail every sea to your shore,

Returning this envelope which has filled my heart with light from above, given so freely.

 

 

 

 

 

Copyright 2015 modtoddinc

Author's Note

please review.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A nice journey in your words.
"I will cross over then, whether mountains, or valleys; I will sail every sea to your shore,
Returning this envelope which has filled my heart with light from above, given so freely."
I did like the above lines a lot. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[dan]

Todd, This write gives off such a warm vibe, the wordplay you employ define the feeling of love and how it is exemplified in such strong feelings explained in the detail of your words. This is going into my library favorites to savor and enjoy at my leisure. Thank you for that! take care...dan

[-Scribe in Style-]

I loved your poem. Words have so much more meaning when the reader can relate to them.. and I certainly related to your words.

Sometimes I think about jumping…

Into your soul no matter how deep, dark and scary the fall

These lines are so intense. A crave to get closer to a soul.. To learn about the other all over. To take on the risk of being part of their life... and the test of keeping up relations.
The way in which have phrased it with the ellipsis brings the idea of suspense, emotion, danger and risk of suicide - the jumping - and into your soul - the deepest place ever.. so the height of the jump is measurable...

Beautiful. Your opening is also quite breath taking
Thanks for sharing dear poet!
A

[kclyaine]

Just use the internet instead. It will arrive in an instant. Just kidding.
That was indeed a lovely love poem.
I don't really understand the first line. Can you enlighten me please?

[modtoddinc]

Thank you for reading my little poem. The first line is the protagonist opening an envelope under the light of the moon...

[kclyaine]

ohh.. I thought you were saying like the moon is paper thin or just spelling mistake.
Thank you for taking your time replying to my question.

[modtoddinc]

no problem... I like to write with room for interpretation... so paper thin is also a figure of speech meaning you can hear through the walls... in this case the words through the envelope... also a "paper thin moon" might imply a sliver of moonlight? :)

Peace, Todd

[wordman]

a love poem at it`s best,traveling the heart and soul

[modtoddinc]

As always: loyal reviewer! Thanks wordman! Much appreciated.

Peace, Todd