F L O W E R

I was the
Flower
You were the rain
I needed you
But I couldn't handle all of you So you drown me...

Reviews

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Short bittersweet and to the point - great write in a brevity of expression! Could I make a suggestion: to add more powerful imagery and stanza solidity; perhaps present the format as follows:
I was
The flower
You were
The rain

I needed you
But I couldn't handle
All of you
So you drown me...

Just a suggestion mind ... :-)