Inspiration

My answer to the Poetry Challenge to pen a poem about what inspires me.

MomzillaNC · "Inspiration"

Lollipops and raindrops

Sunflowers and sun-kissed daisies

Rolling surf and raging sea

Sailing ships and submarines

Old Glory and “purple mountain’s majesty”

Screaming guitar and lilting rhyme

Flight of fancy and high-steppin’ dances

Set free my mind to wander…

Imagine the ant’s marching journeys.

Fly, in my mind’s eye, on butterfly wings.

Roam the distant depths of space.

Unfurl tall sails and cross the ocean.

Pictures made just to enthrall

Creating images from my truth

Painting hopes and dreams on my canvas

Capturing, through my lens, the ephemeral

Let me ruminate ‘pon sensual darkness…

Tremble o’er Hollywood’s fluttering Gothics…

Ride the edge of my seat with the hero…

Weep with the heroine’s desperation.

Yet… more than all these things…

Give me words spun out masterfully…

Terms set out in meter and rhyme…

Phrases bent to rattle the soul…

Prose that always miraculously inspires me!

The trill runs up my spine, as I recall…

A touch… a caress…a whispered kiss…

Ebony eyes embracing my soul…

Two souls united in beat of hearts.

A butterfly flutter in my womb

My lover’s wonder o’er my swelling

The testament of our love given life

Newly laid in my lover’s arms

Luminous, sweet ebony eyes

Just so much like his father’s

A gaze of wonder and contentment

From my babe at mother’s breast

Words of the Divine set down for me

Faith, Hope, Love, and Charity

Grace, Mercy, and undeserved Salvation

“My Shepherd will supply my need”

These are the things that inspire me.

by D. Denise Dianaty

Author's Note

This is my offering in answer to MusicManiac's challenge in our group: Poetry Challenge.

Reviews

[LuLuIcey]

I like the conclusion(well I don't know quite a lot of words in the beginning....I apologize). Faith, hope ,love, charity, grace, mercy and undeserved salvation, these are what I need in my life.
However, I think I should add "honestly", when everything is real, they have their meaning in it. But that they are fake, it doesn't mean anything. It should be...
Well, the poem, I can't really comment about it cause I am not a poem writer...sorry. But I think the first few paragraphs express your feeling.
Impression. Maybe.
Thanks for submitting~

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you. Which parts did you have difficulty understanding? Is it a colloquial thing? For example, "Old Glory and 'purple mountain’s majesty'" are, respectively, the US flag and a phrase from the song, "America the Beautiful."

As for adding "honesty," well, how can you not have honesty when you have "Words of the Divine set down for me; Faith, Hope, Love, and Charity; Grace, Mercy, and undeserved Salvation?"

[LuLuIcey]

Thanks~I am in HK and i don't know much about it...hehe
I didn't mean that but I did have friends got faith, hope, love, and charity; grace, mercy, and undeserved salvation, but somehow, maybe she is dishonest to herself, those aren't true....and her friends(not me) are just kind of social bullying.
I will not argue with this...thanks again~

[MomzillaNC]

I'm sorry, where/what is "HK?"

[LuLuIcey]

Hong Kong China

[MomzillaNC]

Oh. Okay. Well, which phrases were giving you difficulties? I'm happy to de-colloquialize them for you.

[LuLuIcey]

Hopefully,@Let me ruminate ‘pon sensual darkness…
Tremble o’er Hollywood’s fluttering Gothics…
Ride the edge of my seat with the hero…
Weep with the heroine’s desperation.
Mostly that paragraph...Thanks...

[MomzillaNC]

Hollywood produces a lot of movies that trend to the Gothic -- vampires, werewolves, ghosts, etc. These are dark, sexy takes: "sensual darkness."

That was all part of a basic genre (style of story) called "Gothic." Old film movies used to have this flickering look to them from the light and they made this fluttering sound when the machinery was running, but you'd still tremble in delight or fear or excitement or anger at what passed on the screen: "Tremble [over] Hollywood's fluttering Gothics."

Good stories had you sitting on the edge of your seat in the theater, with every excitement the hero of the piece went through onscreen, including those wild chases in cars, on horses, in stagecoaches, planes, trains, etc.: "Ride the edge of my seat with the hero"

Emotional movies can make us laugh, make us cry, make us feel; have you ever cried with the hero (male main character) or heroine (female main character)? "Weep with the heroine's desperation"

[LuLuIcey]

Thanks a lot. I finally know the meaning. It is fantastic! Especially the organization part, which I never thought these all will combine together. I am no good at poem...but well, I wanna try once soon~~hehe thanks~~

[MomzillaNC]

Glad to help. Thanks.

Why don't you try combined meter (rhythm) and rhyme? Try 7/9/7/9 meter: that's seven syllables for line one/nine syllables for line two/seven syllables for line three/and nine syllables for line four. Rhyme a/b/a/b: that's rhyming line one with three; and rhyming line two with four.

[LuLuIcey]

Ok, I will try it on this weekend(I need to work on weekdays~~)

[MomzillaNC]

Please send me an RR for what you produce whenever you finish it. For really good examples here on WritersCafe, check out Ploughboy, MAD ENGLISHMAN, Rick Peutter, Tate Morgan, and David Louis Paget; they are probably the best writers of strict meter and rhyme here. Try reading the Rubaiyat too. And E.A. Poe and Emily Dickenson and Robert Frost.

[LuLuIcey]

Thanks. I will hopefully finish it this week. I have my idea about it but just the ryhming....thanks for leading me so much.^^
What is RR anyway...

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome. "RR" = Read, Review

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

A brillant poem. I love it... There ia muse in everything, everywhere. You just have ti listen to her.

[MomzillaNC]

Thanks so much!

[BClancy]

Very well written and pleasant to read. Really enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing :)

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you.

[Briana O'Connor]

I love the way you describe the many things that spark your creativity. To observe and experience with all one's heart is something that inspires mostly all that were blessed that creative gene. The elegance in description, in which not only inspiration was described, but a story was woven, is truly inspiring in itself. Thank you for sharing. Well penned.

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you for such effusive praise.

[TL Boehm]

I don't know if you did it on purpose, I'm guessing yes, but I so appreciated the way you started with God and Country and ended with family and faith. And all those wonderful bits in between "Hollywood's fluttering Gothics, really liked that phrase. A wonderful poem.

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you very much.

I really don't know that I began that way on purpose. All that first part, up to "Yet… more than all these things… " just flowed from my fingertips. The second half flowed from the first as an eye of perspective.

Don't you just love those wonderful -- not gory -- Hollywood takes on the classic Gothic tales?

[hardeep sabharwal]

beautiful words and imagery
and written well, a class piece I say

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you.

[Mila]

Very lovely and flowed so nicely! I really enjoyed reading this. I don't reach much poetry on here, thanks for sharing! :) Well done!

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you.

[Sindu]

That is the most inspiring poem about inspiration. Gives a new hope, new reason to look for. It shows how everything and anything can inspire only you need eye and string and words to do the job.

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you very much.

[Sindu]

you're welcome..