Drowning

 

 

I feel so alone
reaching my hand out
No one is there to pull me out

I’ve dug my self this hole
With no one around

Slipping deeper into the pain
Trying to claw my way out
Fingers bloody
Broken nails on the ground

Tear drops on my cheek
And death in my eyes

Drowning in the pool of tears
Gasping for one last breath

Reviews

[reminder]

I like it as a metaphor ...or as an intense description of a dire situation! Beautiful word choice! Well done!

[The Flawed]

Full of emotion, its good, it makes me feel the way you did when you wrote it and that's what a good poem dose.

[Kerwin]

This is powerful and very full of obvious emotion.....

[Jeff Bresee]

And the worst part about drowing is that in the final moments, you go numb and all becomes warm and comfortable...or at least so you think.

Never stop struggling against the current.

Nice Work

Jeff

[Glee]

An inspiring write. Just the way I like it. Short and to the point.