Drownig In Pain

I'm at the point where I just don't give a F. Nice guys finsih last, and play the game or get played are the rules that i'm going to live by from now on!

 

I’m submerged in an ocean of despair

Smashed pieces of my heart float and sink everywhere

Cause I’m a sucker for love

And at times love just don’t care.

The strong undercurrents of emotions in vain

Leaves me struggling through the pain

To reach the surface and breathe.

How can this stress I relieve?

When my presence wasn’t needed for vivid images

Of another man between your legs to form,

Then become constant and relentless,

Like waves pummeling my mental shores.

My coast is where love like a light house use to boast.

Now, pain, revenge, and hatred, post

On an island that is far from deserted

Called loneliness,

Where people coexist, but underneath each surface

Lays delta’s of anguish.

Surviving on bottom feeding fish, small crustaceans,

Alcohol and a drug mix.

My distress calls either weren’t heard, overlooked, or dismissed.

These wounds only time can fix.

The sun has now set on what used to feel like one of God’s gifts.

Through the darkness the moon rises and slowly slips

Giving light to the lonely survivors

Who ride the rise and fall of the tide.

As I cling to hope, faith, and pride,

Wondering why I just didn’t die.

Left to cope with the rapids of life

Against the boulders of or trials and tribulations

I crash, bash, and get thrashed.

My lessons have been learned; that nice guys finish last,

And the future isn’t clear when drifting through the past.

So I resist the abyss and depressions downward whirlpool pull,

Only to appear where the water has begun to pick up its pace

Anxiety causes my heart to race

As I cascade over fate’s unforgiving waterfall

Where reality and dreams converge…     

Author's Note

I don't know if this piece is done but it is what it is

Reviews

[Richielee]

bloody hell mate,this is magnificent,in fact amazing

[Holly O'Brien]

I loved the flow of this one....and I liked the way you played with the words (e.g. How can this stress I relieve?) keeping the flow persistent. I personally think a lot of people will be able to relate to this poem.

I often don't like to give personal advice because people be like ugh...u dn't understand. But I just wanna say that heartbreaks happen to everyone...but you shouldn't let it break you or your good nature. The only person you will be depriving of the real thing is yourself.

[Celeste21]

As opposed to my optimism, this poem lacks complete hope but not depth. This poem is several fathoms deep and the end did feel as if there was more to the story and more to say. However, leaving it that way allows the reader to fill in their own blanks whatever deems fit and fits their own unique situation. I know these feelings well. Drowning so deep you don't know how to come up to the surface, or whether or not you want to...

[EmpressPoetess]

"It", is very poignant and deeply expressive of painful loneliness; the vow to give up, then the need to love again, sinks one deeply into despair at times. Your metaphors are outstanding, able to send the reader to the heart of it. A lot of emotion is put into this. Outstanding write.