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No form.

A Poem by Mr.Write
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Meh

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No form in the dark
No light from the ark
The ark holds my void the empty mark.

BUT I'M HOPEFUL!
OPTIMISTIC AM I, I'M CHEERFUL!
I BREATHE THE AIR - LIFE IS BEAUTIFUL!

Then I'm home alone by myself
Mistakes I made by myself
My opportunities lost - I'm besides myself.

THEN THE SUN RISES
THE NEW DAY BRINGS NEW SURPRISES
MISTAKES ATONED A NEW ME ARISES!

God I hate when it happens so quick
Disappointment flowing through me so thick
The sting of shame like a burning wick.

SO I LEAVE AND THEN I MEET HER
SHE MAKES ME HOPE AND I BELIEVE HER
"NO MORE DEPRESSION FOR YOU," SHE SAYS, I WON'T REFUSE HER.

No more sorrow in my whispers now
No more waiting, I'm getting better now
My life is my own once more now that we're together now.

© 2017 Mr.Write



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Mr.Write
Felt bored, wrote a poem between read request.

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Unsure of the meandering here, whether positive or negative, whether true emotions or the writer's perception of a search for happiness.

Strange how boredom can lead to mystery, to uncovering something even the poet didn't know was present.. or manufactured!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Mr.Write

4 Months Ago

emjoy= J.J. N.?
I feel like you're the same person.
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Unsure of the meandering here, whether positive or negative, whether true emotions or the writer's perception of a search for happiness.

Strange how boredom can lead to mystery, to uncovering something even the poet didn't know was present.. or manufactured!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This comment has been deleted by the poster.
Mr.Write

4 Months Ago

emjoy= J.J. N.?
I feel like you're the same person.
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It is very difficult to be happy when you are sad. You proved by this poem that it is possible. Beautifully written. I really liked this.

Posted 4 Months Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mr.Write

4 Months Ago

Thanks for stopping by I'm glad you liked it.
Najam Us Saher

4 Months Ago

You're welcome.
Nice - to me this was a 'light' read, but still with so much meaning.

Great job!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mr.Write

4 Months Ago

Thank you for your valuable words and time. It was supposed to just be a brief reprieve between answ.. read more
I just realized that this poem can either have a good or bad conclusion depending on who you determine "her" to mean.

If you choose to interpret "her" as a woman the depressed narrator meets then all is well and he gets his life together. However should you ascribed a more sinister role to the "her" in question(like say... death) then the poem's final narrative will take on a darker tone or a "bad ending."

Posted 4 Months Ago


The ups and downs of depression or the bipolar personality. You depict them so good...:)...............

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mr.Write

4 Months Ago

Thank you for those kind words Mr. Khalil. The narrator is definitely depressed and forces himself t.. read more
Sami Khalil

4 Months Ago

Wow. You are welcome...:)................
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BUT I'M HOPEFUL!
OPTIMISTIC AM I, I'M CHEERFUL!
I BREATHE THE AIR - LIFE IS BEAUTIFUL!
THE NEW DAY BRINGS NEW SURPRISES
MISTAKES ATONED A NEW ME ARISES!


Awesome, tone

Walking in a park
Good job mr white

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SSR

4 Months Ago

You are absolutely right. But after reading it i remember Saitama.. I don't know why. But good job
Mr.Write

4 Months Ago

I have a theory I think it's becasue of "ONE PUNCHHH!!!"
SSR

4 Months Ago

Ha ha lol.....

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