Guesstimate

Inspired by, Sleepless Volcano's,poem, 'One day you'll understand'.

Naani ( 20 to 25 syllables, 4lines)

Even if it's veiled,
I still can discern your mood,
Your reasons, spares.
For your eyes voice volumes!


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Sedoka (5,7,7. 5,7,7)

Even if it's veiled,
I still can discern your mood
Affixing your reasons, spares.

With heed I proceed
For your eyes can voice volumes
In kaleidoscopic hues.

Reviews

[CD Campbell]

Makes me wonder what you're going to try next. You whip your puzzle pieces into varied works of art and bend the words to your will. I've been enjoying the experimentation. What inspires you to try all these different forms?

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you CD, for your wonderful thoughts. I am only dressing up old notions in new outfits ( forms).

[Relic]

The eyes are another way of communication that at times are just as understandable as words. I like the two versions being they show your versatility as a poet.

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you. Tim, for your lovely review.

[Sami Khalil]

I knew you have that power of discernment. Are you sure you are not a pshychic other than a poet. The eyes are truly the windows to our souls and they can tell volumes. Masterful penning as usual...

[Mrudula Rani]

I do have a vague sixth sense and perceive wonderful writings of my friends... thank you dear friend for your lovely comments.

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha. You are welcome...

[emmajoy]

To turn a page and learn a lesson is a gift for a lifetime, Mrudula. Many thanks for leaving two fine examples of precise wordage and yet, in a charming way. You were inspired, now I am too!

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you Emmajoy, your lovely words are always inspiring dear.

[emmajoy]

I really meant what i left you. Am such a haphazard writer, so, discovering new forms - if only to see 'how' , really inspires. x

[SleeplessVolcano]

Oh, what a joy to read this! Inspired by my poem? Oh you make me blush! Nothing inspires a poet like poetry :)
I need to have a go at these forms - they look delicious!

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you. I have said it before and I will say it again, you are one of the best writers here on WC, Sleepless Valcano.

[Ana Papaya]

Hi Mrudula, I love how you modified the poem to make it something different. Enhanced.
the last stanza in the second is especially good.

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you Ana, iwonderful to hear from you.

[Ana Papaya]

you are welcome!

[barleygirl]

You must be feeling quite experimental! This is a great way to show how a poetic decision might be made between different forms, by noting how this same message can be delivered in each format. I love your message, I love your analytical process, & I love how you inadvertently teach your fellow poets a thing or two all the time without even giving it a thought! *smile* Fondly, Margie

[Mrudula Rani]

Querida Margie, thank you for your kind words. I was just having a little fun with words by putting them in forms. um beijo.

[barleygirl]

I truly believe the best writers enjoy playing with words this way! *smile*

[Mrudula Rani]

You are too kind, meu doce Querida.

[Neville]

Under the circumstances, I am hereby compelled to thank both you, my dear friend and Sleepless Volcano for what is essentially more than a poetic treat, but a genuine pleasure.. a brave endeavour and perfectly executed........ Neville

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you dear friend for your generous and affectionate words, I appreciate you very much.

[Neville]

good to hear and likewise...

[Mrudula Rani]

Uma abraço bem apertado.

[Crowley]

You are right, about the eyes, and about the short but perfect verses!! They speak volumes. Great writing!!!

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you,Crowley. I always appreciate your reviews.